"You Are My Spring"

By: Coldbluesky.

Reviewer: St-renaissance.

1-Title: "You Are My Spring" sounds like an average title, definitely romantic. It entails a dramatic progress from darkness to light, perhaps it includes an inner conflict of the main character. It's not by any means, original or creative because usually Spring is used in literature to deliver an allegorical meaning of progression and personal development.

Rating: [8/10].

2-Description/Foreword: The description is just perfect, neatly constructed, it serves both practical and literary functions. It provides an insightful glimpse into the general idea of the story without spoiling anything. I like how you've introduced both main characters in the description so you wouldn't have to rely on any detailed introduction during the first chapter. However, the actual layout of the description can backfire, you've got this line dividing up the description into random paragraphs and this method can actually rob the actual description (the first paragraph) of its importance. I suggest that you keep the first paragraph which is the only description that matters, and add everything else to the Foreword section where you're normally free to say whatever you like to your readers. The poster is just as lovely and I definitely wouldn't change a thing about it.

Rating: [9/10].

3-Plot: The start of the story is interesting enough, it features a brief background regarding the main characters and includes illustration of the scenery involved in the main events. Here's the thing, there's no actual plot to this story. By the third chapter there should be a proper build-up to the , but there's no build-up or because there's no conflict and there's no conflict because you don't actually have a plot.

A plot must consist of many things despite the length or genre of the story. Exposition, build-up, conflict, , descension and resolution are all vital aspects of every plot that must be introduced to your story. I'm mentioning this because without those important aspects you cannot develop an interesting story; your story isn't all that interesting (Sorry, but listen to me first) because it's nearly hollow. When you don't properly employ the necessary elements of plot, your story cannot progress; meaning the relevance of events in your story will be doubted and the sensibility of your characters' actions won't translate through to the readers.

The only way to fix this issue without affecting the substance of your story is to edit out scenes that don't contribute to the development of the plot. Write in scenes that foreshadow future events or anything really, at this point, your story needs a change of pace because it's getting boring by the fourth chapter and that's not good.

I absolutely do not recommend giving the character of Nayeon a point of view or narrative perspective. This character hasn't been introduced properly and its map of psychological information is yet to be explored by your readers. You can supply this character with a narrative voice when its persona has been familiarised to the readers because premature switching of narratives between a familiar charact