"Beloved Sonia" By: Nithya
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“Beloved Sonia”
By: Nithya
Reviewer: St-renaissance.
1-Title: “Beloved Sonia” is definitely an interesting title, it’s original and carries a specific proper noun (name) which means that a story is on order. A beginning, middle and an end, we’d love to know the story behind the name and the term of endearment.
Rating: 10/10.
2-Description: The description isn’t really helpful, it doesn’t provide any information regarding the story or helps illustrate the title. The description has failed to deliver its purpose and I believe that it might be more useful to have it be reshaped into a literary-appropriate paragraph where your readers can understand what they’re going into without having to read the whole thing. Maybe you’d like to consider something like mentioning the protagonist of your story in the description, and their motives/aims.
Rating: I won’t rate this portion until you’ve reconstructed it and given it proper attention.
3-Plot: The beginning is very interesting, there are a lot of useful information alongside an efficient background foundation. Even though there aren’t any environmental factors, the story centres in a limited sphere and can use social extensions such as class issues, race, gender, mental maladjustment and political corruption. Doing so can help expand the setting applied to the story which will inevitably reflect on your characters and how they accept/reject certain theories or philosophies. The general pace of the story is absolutely incredible, you don’t need to change a thing, it’s careful while maintaining suspense as the narrator slowly unveils hidden details of the character’s past. Your story falls under the Post-Modern (YA) genre which usually doesn’t shy away from focusing an investigative lens on the character’s opinions on social injustice, traditional practice, and scientific indulgences. The POV used here is the third-person point of view which is both common and efficient. Narrating a character’s life and story requires a general and impartial glimpse and can be enhanced by using elements such stream-of-conscious and soliloquies. The type of narration used here is personal but carries a hint of biographical narrative, it takes care of the character’s past and makes sure to involve the reader in their life as much as possible. There are few grammatical issues in the first chapter, for example: ‘Making his ends meet’should be ‘Making ends meet’, ‘New born’should be ‘Newborn’. Consider installing a lovely program called Grammerly, it helps you correct any grammatical or structural issues as you’re writing.
Here’s the thing, when we write a romantic story or any story with a romantic element, we must keep in mind that the audience will not care for the couple if their relationship is treated with shallowness. The audience must understand the importance of this relationship and whythey should feel something when it comes to an end. Gradually, the readers are introduced to each character sepa
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