“Blooming Days”

By: JasminWesson99

-Reviewer: Gtoprenaissance

-Rating/scoring evaluation format.

1-Title: “Blooming Days” sounds like a title that promises the readers an uplifting ending; it speaks of romance, serenity and tranquility. It isn’t by any means theatrical or dramatic. It would most likely blend in with the rest of the romantic/fluff titles that are so commonly written around here. It isn’t bad at all, just a tad bit generic and indifferent. Unless you’re aiming for that kind of calm and safe environment, then the title suits the intention.

Rating: [4/5].

2-Description/Foreword: The description is very helpful to the readers; it helps them understand the base of the story. Your description is very brief yet beneficial, which is recommended and suitable. It recites a brief introduction about the general romantic atmosphere of the story.

Foreword: Alongside the display of credits and poster, I think that the foreword portion of your story should be edited and used to describe the main character (OC), since there’s only a picture of the other main character (Baekhyun). All in all, there’s not much to be said about the description/foreword, considering that you’ve pretty much done a convenient job regarding the brief introduction. Also, the cover is absolutely smashing!

Rating: [9/10].

3-Plot: The beginning is very intriguing; it exhibits the daily norms of a bewildered teenager, which reaches out to most of us readers. I do have something to say though, during the introductory scene, the readers are left with almost no clue about the main character’s personality. All that we know about her is that she’s a character embedded in a broken family. The readers are left to presume the time/place setting alongside attempting to piece together the biological relations of faintly mentioned characters to the main character, Kim Choon Hee. When introducing a character, any characters (major-minor-round-flat) make sure to mention the emotional and psychological effects that this character carries. For example, when introducing a quondam friend, take some time to carefully illustrate its emotional complexion: whether it’s by broaching a psychological illness, in which the character is found, or whether it’s by mentioning the faintest of details which disclose the importance of this character that is being introduced.

Not once has the identity of Myung Ki been explained, it was difficult to actually understand who that character is. You could edit the chapter and add more details about that character because if you don’t, it will be considered as a plot hole, since it wasn’t mentioned anywhere that this character is related to the main character. On the other hand, the chapter felt rushed and incomplete because it lacks the significant principle which is sentimentality. The emotions rushing through the main character’s mind must be conveyed to the readers; American scholar Donald K. Fry once said on one of his blogs: “The vocabulary of description is huge; the diction of human emotion is limited and limiting.” So, to make the reader understand the raw emotions developed by one character towards the other, you must use the suitable adjectives instead of writing “Whenever we talked, my heart would race and my face would turn pink”. Think of it like that: my main character must be seated in a lonely environment where its sentimentality is let loose and free.

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