“From A Distance” P.2 By: Ddeokbxkkii.
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“From A Distance”
P.2
By: Ddeokbxkkii.
Reviewer: Gtoprenaissance.
Plot/Character Development: So, so far I’ve only seen improvement, the sensible extent between the inner monologue and external dialogue is quite impressive. The space between the dialogues and monologues serve as an assistant responsible for aligning the psychological impressions which reflect against the characters’ future interpretation. I see that you’ve taken my advice about allowing the main character to experiment with taking the initiative in dialogues, it made the main character appear more colourful and alive.
I think it would be best if you could cultivate a sense of stimulating drama around the seventh chapter, I know you already have prepared for a but it’s not gripping or enthralling enough to shift emotions. Don’t be afraid to let go of one of the characters, such literary practice can drive the readers into searching for outcomes and resolutions; however, you must choose said character with diligence and wisdom. The storyline is moving with an appropriate speed but you’ve seemed to be neglecting the significant details which are consequential to the development of the plot.
I did notice that you’ve allowed the characters to converse outside the lines of previously molded questions and concerns, it gifts the characters a sense of sensibility and diversity. I’m glad that you’ve taken my advice and put into consideration and execution the idea of vocalizing the m
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