"The Sun of the Wolf"

By: Special-nay

Reviewer: Gtoprenaissance

1-Title: “The Sun of the Wolf” is an interesting title, a bit mysterious and intriguing. It exhibits a puzzling sort of fantasy, so the readers may have something to work with from the beginning, like an enigmatic introduction, instead of the common dramatic, theatrical titles.

Rating: [10/10].

2-Description/Foreword: The description was very brief but in a creative way, it draws attention from the characters to the general theme of the story. It specifically declares the outlandish feel to the story rather than surprising the readers with unspecified fantasy. There’s not much to be said here, I really like it.

Rating: [10/10].

3-Plot: The very first element I’ve noticed is the social difference between the two characters, which can be a tricky matter considering it is a common theme in literature. The layout of the introduction is clever, and might I point out the obvious, the writing style is tremendously elegant, almost too elegant to be portrayed as a three-chapter story (Please consider writing more, you’re brilliant). One thing I’d like to point out as a start is the repetitive mention of multiple events and ranks which some readers might find difficulty in understanding. For example, when mentioning a rank of some sort, make sure to carefully illustrate the prominent task or mission of said occupier.

Like, “The Duke of so and so, has been keeping an unmerciful eye on his province…” and “The kings-guard, whose wrathful sense of leadership nominated him as the enemy’s biggest threat.” Phrases like that help engrave the name and position of a character in the readers’ minds.

The first major event is supposedly the battle between the houses. A brief background information would have supplied this event with a grander importance because it was introduced in a rush, which I think is disappointing because the idea behind the plot itself is incredible and creative; I’ve never read anything like it on this platform. Regarding the houses, the introduction was brief, yet adequate, which I salute you for. You should consider doing the same regarding the major plot points, such as first encounters or conflicts.

There’s really not much to be said here, you’ve put my stories and I to shame. I can tell that your story w