"Sunrise Drive"

By: TEZmiso.

Reviewer: Gtoprenaissance.

1-Title: "Sunrise Drive" doesn't really carry along a certain meaning which can be detected right away. Perhaps it's a romantic story encompassing tragic elements and led by a stream of consciousness narration, perhaps it's a Drama which brings about the audience a rollercoaster of emotions. Those are merely hypothetical conclusions of the general nature of the story and its themes, what's more important is the fact that your title is quite ambiguous, which isn't necessarily a bad idea. Usually, ambitious titles rely on the description to provide a more insightful explanation of the title, but that's not always the case. In general, the title carries a sense of freshness, mysticism and new beginnings, I think it's absolutely fit for a one-shot. 

Rating: [10/10].

2-Description/Foreword: The description is absolutely incredible, short and sweet, maintaining its credibility and ability to reference the title whilst sparing an insight into the plot of the story. I frankly don't think I can critique the structure, the input or the context; it's perfection! 

Rating: [10/10].

3-Plot: Right, I see you've initiated the introductory paragraph by sustaining the structure of the plot with an environmental description; you can never go wrong with that! Considering the length of your one-shot, I'd suggest treating the environmental illustration with intricate delicacy; avoid hoarding the detailed description of the scenery into one corner of the story. By wisely distributing the description, the layout of each main event won't feel misplaced or hollow. I can see you've provided a brief preface of the general plot (there isn't one) and it centers around the main character's daily observations of the suburbs and its inhabitants. 

You know, I generally nitpick when I do these reviews and I've noticed some issue regarding the grammatical and syntactic health of your narration. When constructing a conversation between two characters (dialogues not monologues) you must use the correct punctuation symbols to dictate when a certain conversation is starting and when it is finishing, and it's useful for distinguishing between one character's speech and the other. You must use the inverted brackets or quotation marks so as to avoid any confusion that may occur between the general narrative and the dialogues. Just thought I'd bring this to your atte