“Crescendo”

By: Emilieee.

Review: Gtoprenaissance.

1-Title: Right, so the title’s function in literature is just as important as an enthralling plotline that’ll fascinate your readers; as unfortunate as it sounds but the audience will most likely assess the initiative outlook on your story based on the title alone. “Crescendo” sounds like a wise choice; it naturally correlates to the general theme of your story while maintaining a beautifully rhythmic ring that’ll etch its position in the readers’ minds. It’s brilliant!

Rating: [10/10].

2-Description/Foreword: The description is helpful, though long, it’s helpful. There’s a single defect to this method of description, you could’ve shortened the description by highlighting the important aspects which every reader will need in order to start the first chapter, and the remaining portion of the description can easily be turned into an initial chapter which is simple yet necessary for cradling background information and simple introduction. Such chapters are used to introduce the narrative and to illustrate the surrounding scenery. Also, the poster is simply heavenly!

Rating: [9/10].

3-Plot: the beginning is brilliant, though assertive in point and structure; it’s beautifully sorrowful enough to be referred to as romantically tragic by the contemporary standards of Nouveau Roman, where the literary focus point of the introduction slowly transitions into another form whilst providing a diverse outlook on past through memorabilia; in your case, such practice was accomplished through the classical notion of rumination.

There’s a peculiar way you’ve seemed to assign as ideal; the pace of your story is quick and convenient, yet the storyline seems to be going nowhere interesting. The duet to which the characters have been chosen to perform is a refreshing focus-point but it shouldn’t be the focus of absolutely everything. The dialogues rarely revolve around something other than the duet and that’s a mistake in literature. You could easily rid yourself of the problem by licensing the main character’s inner monologue to take over the issue of this duet, while the dialogues may vary in kind and topic. When your dialogues revolve around the same subject whilst the character is prohibited from mentally analysing the issue, the storyline will be perceived as tedious and your characters hollow and shallow.

The second chapter moves really nicely, but the same issue with the dialogue is introduced here as a narrative point; the story does indeed revolve around the duet, music, and whatnot but it rarely expands itself beyond the commonly regulated limits with the locals. Try to add new events that occur in different places other than the region of university, dormitory and similar places. Experiencing with different locations provides a sense of colour and freshness to your story.

Here’s the thing, there’s a plot, but it’s not climactic enough to be squeezed into a three-chaptered story. I’m glad you’ve decided to return the storyline to this whole unstable family foundation issue, but it’s not strong enough to base the plot around it, this i