"Unfaithful" By: Ddeokbxkkii
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"Unfaithful"
By: Ddeokbxkkii
Reviewer: Gtoprenaissance
1-Title: "Unfaithful" doesn't really sound original or authentic, I've seen it done before and I have reviewed two of your stories before which carry similar titles. It's clearly Drama and Romance, because the title entails it as so, but it's not exciting or interesting. At this point, I'm relying on the description to grasp my attention rather than the title.
Rating: [8/10].
2-Description/Foreword: The description, though quoted, does serve its primary function of providing an insightful glimpse into the general plot. A brief description is always recommended and advantageous and the length and content of your description are all on point. The poster is absolutely stunning and fitting to the general motive of the story.
Rating: [9/10].
3-Plot: I see you've provided brief background information regarding the main character and that's always a smart move in Drama. However, let's jump into the use of diction, refrain from using Expolitio to assure the same idea, it's not recommended, such as the phrase "surprised exclaim". The adjective doesn't nurture the development of the noun, rendering it unsuitable to be used. Also, the phrase “More dead as ever" doesn't make any sense and it contradicts itself. "Deadlier than ever" or "as dead as ever" are considerable alternatives. Regarding the speech clearness, it's not advantageous to supply foreign words or phrases such as 'Hyung' and 'Noona' but since the story is presumably set in Korea, changing the titles won't be necessary.
Speech effectiveness could use some work, using casual, nonchalant colloquial speech in Drama/Romance doesn't succeed at extracting an emotionally reactive response from the readers because when incorporated into the dialogues, it paints the characters as boring and dishonest.
Let's talk about the plot in general, I can't seem to find one other than these two people reminiscing over past memories. That could actually be interesting if you're to use the Stream of Consciousness method of narration, considering it sends the readers alongside the character into this chronologically disordered timelapse of events where you can still take control over them and re-tell them in an interesting way. But in order to do that, you must use the First-Person narrative because you can't employ the Stream of Consciousness method using the Third-Person narrative.
There isn't any plausible plot to the story anyway, at least not a flexible one enough to carry 7 chapters and an epilogue. The s
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