Chapter 9

Department X

The morning sunlight streamed in as Jessica slowly opened her eyes. The ceiling that greeted her was unfamiliar as she struggled to figure out where she was. She shivered from the cold morning air and snuggled closer to a source of warmth beside her. Snippets of memories started flashbacking in her mind as she slowly pieced together what had happened. She remembered Yuri coming over and sharing a kiss with her. Then there was some sort of a blank in between. The last thing she remembered was her foot connecting with the door shutting it, as clothings were shed and passionate kisses were shared. Turning toward the source of warmth beside her,  Jessica couldn't help but stiffle a giggle as she saw what she thought to be the cutest sight ever. The person whom she thought was a piece of artwork, the beautiful Kwon Yuri actually slept with her tongue sticking out slightly. Smiling silently to herself, she picked up her clothes from the floor and headed to wash up.

After washing herself up, Jessica headed back to the bed. Bending down, she gently kissed Yuri on the temple thanking her for the unforgettable one night of passion and headed towards the door. Opening the door , the cold jet of air from the airconditioned corridor greeted her as she shivered in reply. Just then she felt a pair of warm arms encircling her waist from the back, pulling her back into the room.  Before she could respond, she was pressed against the wall as a warm tongue slipped into , intertwining with hers. She broke the kiss minutes later panting heavily as she stared into the sparkling eyes of Yuri not knowing how to respond. Yuri took the initiative and kissed her gently on the cheek this time while whispering a gentle good morning into Jessica's ears which had reddened in the process. Locking the door to prevent Jessica from slipping out again, Yuri headed to the bathroom to wash up leaving a blushing Jessica standing numbly at the doorway.

When Yuri had finished washing up and slipped into a comfortable bath robe, she headed out only to find Jessica still staring numbly at a black spot on the wooden door frame growing redder and redder as the minutes passed by. Smiling at the sight, she gently took Jessica's hand, intertwined it in her's and led her to sit down on the bed. Kneeling down on the floor beside her, Yuri gently picked up Jessica's hand. As Jessica's gaze slowly fixated on her face, she spoke gently to her. "Remember my last words to you yesterday?" Jessica bobbed her head up and down as she nodded quietly, her gaze still fixated on the beautful face that was merely inches away from her own. Yuri smiled and continued. "I really meant it when I asked you for help. I needed you to help me find a way into your heart." Jessica looked at her with a puzzled look on her face as her brows creased trying to comprehend what she has just heard. Yuri gently reached out to smoothen her brows as she continued, "I had fallen in love with you when I first saw you. It was a few weeks ago. I was having dinner at this roadside stall when these two guys just walked in and started smashing everything they saw. Everyone was scared stiffed and you were the only that stood up and defended the old couple that ran the stall. You chased those guys away in an instance even though they were so much larger than you. Then you just smiled at the old couple and left the stall. I fell in love with that smile after that day and you could not imagine how happy I was when I stepped into a random cafe and saw you behind the counter."

Smiling down at Yuri, Jessica replied. "Well that makes us even because it was also your smile that attracted me to you in the first place." Leaning forward, she closed their distance as their lips locked on once again.

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colleenorcullo
#1
Chapter 55: SooNa is so sweet T~T
Taengoo311
#2
Chapter 68: Umm why no updates? D:
SunnyandTae
#3
Chapter 32: New reader. Love where it's going. I'm up to the Christmas special and love it. It's written so well. I can't wait to finish :)
badtestament #4
Wuuthraad : Hahaha, well. Not everything will go to their food binges. I will have a part 3 to explain what they did with the money
badtestament #5
Forever9 : Haha, *evil gleams somemore* Maybe I should tell Youngie about your suspicious love for rilakuma.. *rubs hands in glee* YAH dongsaeng, wae you no update childcare chaos... *prepares the darts you loaned me*
Wuuthraad
#6
I now feel bad for Kim Tae Woo, now that he's going to jail and all his cash is going to fund SooNa food binges XD
badtestament #7
Vedasone : Thanks for the comments. =) Really thanks.

Mashipao : I will post my reply on your wall ok?? =D Thanks for reading my fanfic and thanks even more for your detailed comments and improvement suggestions
MashiPao
#8
S: LAST COMMENT! I SWEAR! XD
While reading your story, I noticed the pros and cons of your writing. So I want to give you some advice to make your fic better and your writing overall. :P
First of all, you do research on your topics. Which is really good. it's very easy to tell that you did your research on the guns and whatnot. In fact, would you mind helping me with that kind of stuff? LOl The amount of information within your story (and the gun explanations in the sequel) clearly show the amount of research you did. Few authors do this large amount of research so kudos to you!
Next, you have AMAZING vocabulary and details. ABSOLUTELY AMAZING. Although, your sentences can get a bit awkward at times, it doesn't hide the fact that your details are amazing. However, I think that all the details you have are like a double-edged sword in a sense. It's really great to read a fic with such amazing detail but sometimes it gets...tedious. Your updates are rather short so all I can see is giant paragraph after paragraph. And honestly, it makes me feel like I'm reading an essay instead of a story. So I would recommend maybe taking your giant paragraphs and separating them into smaller ones. That way, it's much easier to read. Not a lot of people want to read giant blocks of text.
Also, your details and whatnot overpower your dialogue. You have more details than you have dialogue. In my opinion, dialogue is what makes a story and fleshes out the characters' personalities. So perhaps add more dialogue into your story?
You have problems writing dialogue as well which is awfully strange because I see you doing it the right way and then you mostly do it the wrong way...such as in Chapter 47. You squish all of your dialogue into one paragraph which is incorrect. (And it causes many readers to run away LOL) There must be a new paragraph every time a new person speaks.
So I'm done. Whew that took a long time to type up. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed and found my comments useful~
MashiPao
#9
Moving on to the next comment! LOL I don't know...I might hit a new high and have to write three comments. I still have much to say. :P Just a heads up, I read teh sequel too so I'll be squishing everything in the comments here. XD
Anyway, continuing about Tiffany. Thumbs up for continuity. I noticed you still had pink dossiers in your sequel. Hehe sorry I just like it when the author stays consistent. I always have smile on my face every time Tiffany enters the cafe: walks/runs in like a boss then glomps everyone. XD (Also yay for slight Taenyish moment in the sequel haha).
Moving on to the highlight of the story that I found the most amusing: Jessica's and Taeyeon's test to get into Department X. Haha it was great. Cucumbers and roasted cockroaches? Wow. Must've been hell. The examiners weren't very smart when they decided not to tie up Jessica's feet. XD Aso I love the background of the Cafe with No Name. I LOL'd at such the lame name and LOL'd even harder when you said "Taeyeon's creativeness". Nice Touch. :)
Moving on the main plot of the story, I must say the Department X definitely have their feet stuck in a pile of crap. Especially Sooyoung. D: It was so sad when she left. Also, I was so surprised at the end when Seohyun drugged Hyoyeon. Why SEOHYUN? WHY? T_T Honestly, I never expected Seohyun of all people. She's too nice and stuff. But you know, the nicest people are probably the most evil and sinister (Does that make me evil? LOL). Going into the sequel, I wonder if Sunny and Hyomin will really fall in love with each other especially since Hyomin is taking such good care of Sunny in the hospital...while Sunny's lover is sulking around, seeking Tiffany for refuge...Shame, Taeyeon. If Sunny caught you, she might have to request you to get into bed immediately. XD Hehe I'm an avid Taeny fan so I'm content with the Taeny development. :P But anyway, Seohyun, why are you so EVIL?! T_T Evil! D: Augghhh...Well, I'm running out of space again. LOL