Chapter 28

Department X

Jessica couldn't believe her ears when the first moan sounded inside her earpiece, Gritting her teeth as the fumes inside her grew with the sounds, she whispered into the mouthpiece. "Yah, Choi Sooyoung! Now of all times?" A louder moan greeted her ears adding oil to the fire burning inside her. Remembering that she was inside Isao's house, Jessica forced herself to calm down as she took out the earpiece and concentrated on taking deep breaths.

Meanwhile a few yards away from the perimeters of Isao's mansion. Taeyeon idlely tapped her fingers as she awaited the all clear signal from Yoona. Sunny kept her eyes glued to the binoculars as she monitored the guards activity searching for a pattern in their actions. She felt taps as she turned to face Taeyeon who was still idlely tapping her finger. Narrowing her eyes, she turned to Taeyeon who looked at her with innocent eyes. "You do realise that this is not a morse code machine you are tapping on right?" She pointed to her as she glared at Taeyeon. It was then that Taeyeon noticed that she has been tapping furiously away on Sunny's . Maintaining a perfectly innocent face, she looked away and pretended she didn't hear anything as her fingers continued tapping. Narrowing her eyes further, Sunny glared at Taeyeon again. A thought came up to her as she suddenly changed into a smile. Smiling at Taeyeon sweetly, Sunny pounced trapping Taeyeon beneath her. Leaning down she kissed Taeyeon who murmured "I really brought this upon myself huh." Sunny smiled as she broke the kiss "Yes, its all your fault this time." Leaning down, she kissed Taeyeon again with more passions this time...

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An hour later...

The netbook beeped as the SYN/ACK analysis was done displaying the results. Sooyoung hastily rearranged her clothes and hair as she walked over to check on the results. Looking at the packet metrics such as TTL and Win Size, she deduced that she was looking at an IIS Server. Typing in a command, she tweaked the IIS exploits as she launched a full out attack on Isao's systems. she finally managed to gain access on the system level. Sending in an LSP Trojan, Sooyoung prayed hoping that the intrusion detection system on Isao's network will not be alerted of her actions. Luckily for her, the intrusion system did not detect the TFTP activities from Sooyoung and she succesfully transfered the LSP trojan and several other batch scripts. Yoona's eyes widen as she saw that they have finally gained the access needed, she threw her arms over Sooyoung and promptly kissed her on the lips. Turning her attention back on the netbook in front of her, Yoona started taking over the controls of the security system in Isao's mansion. Thanks to the trojan Sooyoung has installed, Yoona quickly gained full control over Isao's system. It was now time for the fireworks to began.

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colleenorcullo #1
Chapter 55: SooNa is so sweet T~T
Taengoo311 #2
Chapter 68: Umm why no updates? D:
SunnyandTae #3
Chapter 32: New reader. Love where it's going. I'm up to the Christmas special and love it. It's written so well. I can't wait to finish :)
badtestament #4
Wuuthraad : Hahaha, well. Not everything will go to their food binges. I will have a part 3 to explain what they did with the money
badtestament #5
Forever9 : Haha, *evil gleams somemore* Maybe I should tell Youngie about your suspicious love for rilakuma.. *rubs hands in glee* YAH dongsaeng, wae you no update childcare chaos... *prepares the darts you loaned me*
Wuuthraad #6
I now feel bad for Kim Tae Woo, now that he's going to jail and all his cash is going to fund SooNa food binges XD
badtestament #7
Vedasone : Thanks for the comments. =) Really thanks.

Mashipao : I will post my reply on your wall ok?? =D Thanks for reading my fanfic and thanks even more for your detailed comments and improvement suggestions
MashiPao #8
S: LAST COMMENT! I SWEAR! XD
While reading your story, I noticed the pros and cons of your writing. So I want to give you some advice to make your fic better and your writing overall. :P
First of all, you do research on your topics. Which is really good. it's very easy to tell that you did your research on the guns and whatnot. In fact, would you mind helping me with that kind of stuff? LOl The amount of information within your story (and the gun explanations in the sequel) clearly show the amount of research you did. Few authors do this large amount of research so kudos to you!
Next, you have AMAZING vocabulary and details. ABSOLUTELY AMAZING. Although, your sentences can get a bit awkward at times, it doesn't hide the fact that your details are amazing. However, I think that all the details you have are like a double-edged sword in a sense. It's really great to read a fic with such amazing detail but sometimes it gets...tedious. Your updates are rather short so all I can see is giant paragraph after paragraph. And honestly, it makes me feel like I'm reading an essay instead of a story. So I would recommend maybe taking your giant paragraphs and separating them into smaller ones. That way, it's much easier to read. Not a lot of people want to read giant blocks of text.
Also, your details and whatnot overpower your dialogue. You have more details than you have dialogue. In my opinion, dialogue is what makes a story and fleshes out the characters' personalities. So perhaps add more dialogue into your story?
You have problems writing dialogue as well which is awfully strange because I see you doing it the right way and then you mostly do it the wrong way...such as in Chapter 47. You squish all of your dialogue into one paragraph which is incorrect. (And it causes many readers to run away LOL) There must be a new paragraph every time a new person speaks.
So I'm done. Whew that took a long time to type up. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed and found my comments useful~
MashiPao #9
Moving on to the next comment! LOL I don't know...I might hit a new high and have to write three comments. I still have much to say. :P Just a heads up, I read teh sequel too so I'll be squishing everything in the comments here. XD
Anyway, continuing about Tiffany. Thumbs up for continuity. I noticed you still had pink dossiers in your sequel. Hehe sorry I just like it when the author stays consistent. I always have smile on my face every time Tiffany enters the cafe: walks/runs in like a boss then glomps everyone. XD (Also yay for slight Taenyish moment in the sequel haha).
Moving on to the highlight of the story that I found the most amusing: Jessica's and Taeyeon's test to get into Department X. Haha it was great. Cucumbers and roasted cockroaches? Wow. Must've been hell. The examiners weren't very smart when they decided not to tie up Jessica's feet. XD Aso I love the background of the Cafe with No Name. I LOL'd at such the lame name and LOL'd even harder when you said "Taeyeon's creativeness". Nice Touch. :)
Moving on the main plot of the story, I must say the Department X definitely have their feet stuck in a pile of crap. Especially Sooyoung. D: It was so sad when she left. Also, I was so surprised at the end when Seohyun drugged Hyoyeon. Why SEOHYUN? WHY? T_T Honestly, I never expected Seohyun of all people. She's too nice and stuff. But you know, the nicest people are probably the most evil and sinister (Does that make me evil? LOL). Going into the sequel, I wonder if Sunny and Hyomin will really fall in love with each other especially since Hyomin is taking such good care of Sunny in the hospital...while Sunny's lover is sulking around, seeking Tiffany for refuge...Shame, Taeyeon. If Sunny caught you, she might have to request you to get into bed immediately. XD Hehe I'm an avid Taeny fan so I'm content with the Taeny development. :P But anyway, Seohyun, why are you so EVIL?! T_T Evil! D: Augghhh...Well, I'm running out of space again. LOL
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