Chapter 56

Department X

Sooyoung sat in the driver's seat as her dad's chauffeur had taken leave that day and since they were planning to head out for lunch, she volunteered to drive as she wanted to get her dad all to herself in the bid to try and dig somemore information from him. Getting into the Hummer, she in her breath at the luxury and armory of the interior. Her dad smiled as he grabbed a pistol from one of the guards by his side and fired it at the window from point blank range. Covering her ears from the piercing sounds of the bullets, Sooyoung winced from the impact as her dad simply laughed and knocked against the glass which looks as new as the day it was installed. Sooyoung whistled softly as she silently whispered under her breath "Wow, bulletproof glass and armored car. What a safe combination". Getting into the driver seat, Sooyoung started the engine and set off for the hotel her dad had chosen for the day. Halfway through the journey, Sooyoung noticed 2 Maseratis a distance away from them criss crossing each other in an obvious surveillance pattern. Pressing her foot down on the accerlerator, Sooyoung increased their speed a little as she motioned to her dad to hang on to something. Clutching his hand on the handle by the side, he belted himself in as he nodded slightly indicating that he was ready for whatever she was planning to do.

The two Maserati's behind them suddenly sped up when they realised their cover was blown and boxed them in as the 2 drivers tried ramming them off the lane they were travelling on. Sooyoung fought hard to keep the car in control as the Maseratis rammed her from side to side. Sooyoung gunned the engine and glanced in the side mirrors as the windows of the Maserati were lowered and two KRISS Super V Sub Machine Guns stuck out from the window on each side and bullets plinked off the glass and metal frames as Sooyoung uttered a silent prayer under her breath thankful for the bulletproofing. A car nearby wasn't so lucky as one of the stray bullet hit its bonnet and the car exploded into flames killing the driver and passenger instantly. Sooyoung knew she couldn't keep this up and decided to take a gamble as she eased her foot off the accelerator allowing the 2 Maseratis to cruise parallely with her as the driver tried the ramming techniques again. Sooyoung slammed down her foot down hard onto the brake pedal and shifted the gear stick to reverse as the hummer reacted and started reversing immediately. The bullets they were firing killed the drivers instantly as both the Maseratis lost control and careered off the road. The cars smashed into the cliffs by the side of the road and exploded in flames killing both the gun men instantly. Sooyoung performed a bootlegger's turn  as she turned the car 180 degrees around and exited the highway from the nearest exit.

Finally arriving at the hotel entrance, Sooyoung breathed in deeply to calm her nerves down as she got off the car on shaky legs and forced herself over to the passenger side to open the door for her dad. She felt a gun on her head the moment she exited the vehicle and the passenger door was thrown open as 2 men with ski masks on got into the car and sat beside her dad pointing a glock at his head. The gunmen behind motioned her to get back into the vehicle as he crossed over to the passenger side and threw open the door while keeping a watchful eye over Sooyoung. Not wanting to endanger her dad's life, Sooyoung entered back into the driver's seat as she slowly exited the hotel's porch. The leader of the gun men pointed the direction he wanted her to go in with his gun as the two men at the side jammed the pistol harder into her dad's head making their intention clear. 

Sooyoung drove expressionlessly as she tried to figure out who they were but just as she was about to open , the leader jammed a gun to her temple and raised a finger over the lips area of his ski mask. Motioning her to get off the road, he directed her to drive under a highway's bridge as he pulled on the emergency brake stopping the car. Ordering Sooyoung to place her hands in front of her, he bounded her wrists together with cable tie as he motioned her to get out of the vehicle. Sooyoung stepped away from the vehicle as she saw them forcing her dad who was similarly bounded onto his knees in front of her and the leader held a gun to the back of his head. Even though Sooyoung was tempted to let them kill him there and then but she knew now wasn't the best time for them to do such a thing yet. If LSM dies, another guy would just take over his reins easily and all her efforts would be wasted by then. Deciding to react, Sooyoung lowered her shoulders as she yelled out and charged at the leader before he could squeeze the trigger. The other 2 gunmen reacted instantly as one of them fired in her direction and the bullet grazed past her shoulder and embedded itself into the ground an inch away from her foot. Sooyoung screamed in pain and blood streamed down incessantly turning her white shirt red as it soaked up the blood. Using the adrenaline rush to her advantage, Sooyoung forced herself to block out the pain in her shoulder as she tauted the muscles in her arm and snapped the cable tie over her wrist. Once her hands were free, Sooyoung grabbed the thumbs of one of the gunmen and twisted it sharply to the right breaking the bone as she wrenched the glock off his hands and fired into his kneecap immobilizing him. Spinning around, she squeezed off two more shots hitting both the other gun man in the shoulder and calf bringing him to his knees as he rolled on the floor groaning in pain. The leader had regained his composure by then as he fired in her direction. The bullets ricocheted harmlessly off the cement pillars missing Sooyoung by milimetres as she ran over to her tather's side and pulled him behind the pillars. Handing the gun over to her father, she told him to provide covering fire for her so she could get closer to the leader. He nodded as he looked into her eyes and uttered two words "Be careful." Sooyoung smiled through gritted teeth as she forced herself not to black out from the pain on her shoulder and nodded indicating that she was ready. Her dad started firing in the last known position of the leader as Sooyoung dashed out in his direction under the covers of the pillars. Reaching him in no time, Sooyoung swept his legs from under him as she tackled him to the ground and grappled with him for the gun. The pain in her shoulder flared as black spots appeared before her eyes and her vision was blurred. Sooyoung utlitized the last of her energy as her fist connected to the side of his temple and she gained over the control of the pistol. Aiming it at his head, she was about to squeeze it when she heard clapping sounds erupting from behind her as her dad slowly stepped out from behind the pillar. Nodding his head approvingly, he smiled as he embraced her in his arms and the three men on the floor removed their ski mask revealing the faces of Taecyeon, Hyomin and one unknown guy. The last words Sooyoung heard before blacking out was the voice of her dad whispering into her ears "Congratulations, You passed the test"

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colleenorcullo
#1
Chapter 55: SooNa is so sweet T~T
Taengoo311
#2
Chapter 68: Umm why no updates? D:
SunnyandTae
#3
Chapter 32: New reader. Love where it's going. I'm up to the Christmas special and love it. It's written so well. I can't wait to finish :)
badtestament #4
Wuuthraad : Hahaha, well. Not everything will go to their food binges. I will have a part 3 to explain what they did with the money
badtestament #5
Forever9 : Haha, *evil gleams somemore* Maybe I should tell Youngie about your suspicious love for rilakuma.. *rubs hands in glee* YAH dongsaeng, wae you no update childcare chaos... *prepares the darts you loaned me*
Wuuthraad
#6
I now feel bad for Kim Tae Woo, now that he's going to jail and all his cash is going to fund SooNa food binges XD
badtestament #7
Vedasone : Thanks for the comments. =) Really thanks.

Mashipao : I will post my reply on your wall ok?? =D Thanks for reading my fanfic and thanks even more for your detailed comments and improvement suggestions
MashiPao
#8
S: LAST COMMENT! I SWEAR! XD
While reading your story, I noticed the pros and cons of your writing. So I want to give you some advice to make your fic better and your writing overall. :P
First of all, you do research on your topics. Which is really good. it's very easy to tell that you did your research on the guns and whatnot. In fact, would you mind helping me with that kind of stuff? LOl The amount of information within your story (and the gun explanations in the sequel) clearly show the amount of research you did. Few authors do this large amount of research so kudos to you!
Next, you have AMAZING vocabulary and details. ABSOLUTELY AMAZING. Although, your sentences can get a bit awkward at times, it doesn't hide the fact that your details are amazing. However, I think that all the details you have are like a double-edged sword in a sense. It's really great to read a fic with such amazing detail but sometimes it gets...tedious. Your updates are rather short so all I can see is giant paragraph after paragraph. And honestly, it makes me feel like I'm reading an essay instead of a story. So I would recommend maybe taking your giant paragraphs and separating them into smaller ones. That way, it's much easier to read. Not a lot of people want to read giant blocks of text.
Also, your details and whatnot overpower your dialogue. You have more details than you have dialogue. In my opinion, dialogue is what makes a story and fleshes out the characters' personalities. So perhaps add more dialogue into your story?
You have problems writing dialogue as well which is awfully strange because I see you doing it the right way and then you mostly do it the wrong way...such as in Chapter 47. You squish all of your dialogue into one paragraph which is incorrect. (And it causes many readers to run away LOL) There must be a new paragraph every time a new person speaks.
So I'm done. Whew that took a long time to type up. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed and found my comments useful~
MashiPao
#9
Moving on to the next comment! LOL I don't know...I might hit a new high and have to write three comments. I still have much to say. :P Just a heads up, I read teh sequel too so I'll be squishing everything in the comments here. XD
Anyway, continuing about Tiffany. Thumbs up for continuity. I noticed you still had pink dossiers in your sequel. Hehe sorry I just like it when the author stays consistent. I always have smile on my face every time Tiffany enters the cafe: walks/runs in like a boss then glomps everyone. XD (Also yay for slight Taenyish moment in the sequel haha).
Moving on to the highlight of the story that I found the most amusing: Jessica's and Taeyeon's test to get into Department X. Haha it was great. Cucumbers and roasted cockroaches? Wow. Must've been hell. The examiners weren't very smart when they decided not to tie up Jessica's feet. XD Aso I love the background of the Cafe with No Name. I LOL'd at such the lame name and LOL'd even harder when you said "Taeyeon's creativeness". Nice Touch. :)
Moving on the main plot of the story, I must say the Department X definitely have their feet stuck in a pile of crap. Especially Sooyoung. D: It was so sad when she left. Also, I was so surprised at the end when Seohyun drugged Hyoyeon. Why SEOHYUN? WHY? T_T Honestly, I never expected Seohyun of all people. She's too nice and stuff. But you know, the nicest people are probably the most evil and sinister (Does that make me evil? LOL). Going into the sequel, I wonder if Sunny and Hyomin will really fall in love with each other especially since Hyomin is taking such good care of Sunny in the hospital...while Sunny's lover is sulking around, seeking Tiffany for refuge...Shame, Taeyeon. If Sunny caught you, she might have to request you to get into bed immediately. XD Hehe I'm an avid Taeny fan so I'm content with the Taeny development. :P But anyway, Seohyun, why are you so EVIL?! T_T Evil! D: Augghhh...Well, I'm running out of space again. LOL