Chapter 3

Department X

Author's Notes:
Hi Readers,


Chapter 3 is out now. Hope you guys will enjoy it. This chapter was written after conducting many researches on weaponery and sniping cause I am still a complete idiot to weaponery. This chapter will be the result of my researches. Hope you guys enjoy it. ^_^. All comments short or long, little or big will be greatly appreciated. If you have nothing much to say, A simple hi will suffice as well. At least that way, I know you are reading my fics. This will greatly help to boost my morale as well. Thanks in advance. =D

Chapter 3
Taeyeon sighed as she shook Sunny's hand and invited her into the cafe. Upon stepping in, She noticed the tall one drooling over the cakes that were on display. She walked over and saw the most unresistable puppy eyes ever to be given by a human, at that instance, it reminded her of that movie she saw recently. What was the name again? It was about cat wearing shoes. Ah, she remembered now. The title was Puss in boots. The looks she's getting from the tall one now is definetely a carbon copy of that cartoon. The corners of slowly turned up as she spoke up. "You must be Soo young." The tall girl nodded furiously and cast her glance at the displayed cakes again. Grabbing a knife and plate from behind the counter she turned towards Sooyoung with a smile. "So which one do you want? The chocolate banana mousse cake, the apple crumble or the New York cheese cake?" Sooyoung's eyes litted up and she started looking at the cakes. First she pointed to the chocolate banana mousse, then her finger moved towards the apple crumble and but her eyes were fixed on the cheese cake. Her finger hovered around in circles as it moved from cake to cake obviously undecided. Taeyeon smiled again as she cut a slice from each of the cake and placed it on the plate for her. Grabbing a fork from the sink, she cleaned it and handed it to Sooyoung. "Enjoy." Returning back to her expressionless face, she looked at Yoona and Seohyun who was still huddling behind a table and decided to go back and sleep somemore. Before her back was turned, she saw from the corner of her eyes a beaming Sooyoung who was furiously stuffing cake into and a worried looking Sunny beside her patting her back and telling her to slow down.

Yoona and Seohyun finally decided that this two weren't zombies risen from the dead and approached them cautiously. Seohyun lifted the broomstick protectively over her chest as they got nearer. A sudden movement from Sooyoung made them run back to their little corner again as she suddenly stretched out her hand with a piece of cake on the fork, looked straight at their direction and asked with a smile, "Do you want to share?" Before Seohyun could decide how she could reject her offer politely based on hygiene issues, Yoona had already grabbed a chair and sat down beside Sooyoung eating the offered piece of cake. The two of them happily ate away while Sunny just sat with a look on concern on her face hoping they would not choke with that speed they are going.

Meanwhile in Lindenhof Hill, Zurich

Jessica took out the grey Kestrel 4000 from its pouch, pressed a few buttons and read the figures that was showing on the screen. This device measures the wind speed, humidity, density altitude and much much more. She adjusted the dial on her Schmidt & Bender precision scope while setting up her rifle for her solo mission. Taking out her smart phone, she pressed the button for the secure connection and dial a number. A groggy voice answered the phone as Jessica barked into it. "Yah! I am slaving my out here and you are sleeping?" All she heard was a yawn and then Taeyeon's voice came over the phone sleepily. "Just finish your job quickly, the new arrivals are here." Before jessica could give any smart reply, the call had ended. Cursing her luck for drawing the short straw this time, Jessica lied down on the ground, took a quick glance at her watch before drawing up the hood to her black windbreaker and looked through the sights in her scope. It was 7.36am. 4 more minutes to go. Adjusting her cheek on the cheekpiece of her AS50, she got herself into a more comfortable shooting position and slowly slowed down her breathing while taking in the breath taking views of the St Peter Church, one of the 4 main churches in Zurich. Admiring the supposedly largest clock face in the whole of Europe, Her thought trailed back to the victim on the dossier she saw yesterday. Christoph Feurer, one of the most influential man in Zurich. He made his money through dealing in heavy weaponeries over the black market. Recently word got out that he was selling weapons to the terrorist organizations in Syria and Sudan and this move was leading him to his greatest downfall. The prime minister placed a bounty on his head and it was now Jessica's job to bring it to him in a silver platter. Not literally of course.


As her breathing steadies and her heart beat slows, she noticed 7 black Rolls Royce Phantom stopping in front of the church and many bodyguards stepped out, covering Christoph in all direction. In between gaps, Jessica could see Christoph's bald head reflecting the morning sunlight. Training her sights on that gleaming object, Jessica lined up the shot, held her breath and stopped her heart beat for a second. The deadly silence around her was broken with the explosive sound of her .50BMG catridge exiting from the barrel of her rifle, she winced at the impact of the Buttpad slamming into her shoulder from the recoil as she saw her victim's head blew up in her scope. Literally. The spent bullet fell to the right with a crisp plink and she immediately retreated into covers and started disassmbling the rifle. It took her 2 and a half minutes to load it into the carrying case, picked up the spent catridge and even though she was more than 1500m away, she ran deeper into the covers of the forest around her as they swallowed her up, perfectly erasing the fact that she was there just 5 minutes ago.
 

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colleenorcullo
#1
Chapter 55: SooNa is so sweet T~T
Taengoo311
#2
Chapter 68: Umm why no updates? D:
SunnyandTae
#3
Chapter 32: New reader. Love where it's going. I'm up to the Christmas special and love it. It's written so well. I can't wait to finish :)
badtestament #4
Wuuthraad : Hahaha, well. Not everything will go to their food binges. I will have a part 3 to explain what they did with the money
badtestament #5
Forever9 : Haha, *evil gleams somemore* Maybe I should tell Youngie about your suspicious love for rilakuma.. *rubs hands in glee* YAH dongsaeng, wae you no update childcare chaos... *prepares the darts you loaned me*
Wuuthraad
#6
I now feel bad for Kim Tae Woo, now that he's going to jail and all his cash is going to fund SooNa food binges XD
badtestament #7
Vedasone : Thanks for the comments. =) Really thanks.

Mashipao : I will post my reply on your wall ok?? =D Thanks for reading my fanfic and thanks even more for your detailed comments and improvement suggestions
MashiPao
#8
S: LAST COMMENT! I SWEAR! XD
While reading your story, I noticed the pros and cons of your writing. So I want to give you some advice to make your fic better and your writing overall. :P
First of all, you do research on your topics. Which is really good. it's very easy to tell that you did your research on the guns and whatnot. In fact, would you mind helping me with that kind of stuff? LOl The amount of information within your story (and the gun explanations in the sequel) clearly show the amount of research you did. Few authors do this large amount of research so kudos to you!
Next, you have AMAZING vocabulary and details. ABSOLUTELY AMAZING. Although, your sentences can get a bit awkward at times, it doesn't hide the fact that your details are amazing. However, I think that all the details you have are like a double-edged sword in a sense. It's really great to read a fic with such amazing detail but sometimes it gets...tedious. Your updates are rather short so all I can see is giant paragraph after paragraph. And honestly, it makes me feel like I'm reading an essay instead of a story. So I would recommend maybe taking your giant paragraphs and separating them into smaller ones. That way, it's much easier to read. Not a lot of people want to read giant blocks of text.
Also, your details and whatnot overpower your dialogue. You have more details than you have dialogue. In my opinion, dialogue is what makes a story and fleshes out the characters' personalities. So perhaps add more dialogue into your story?
You have problems writing dialogue as well which is awfully strange because I see you doing it the right way and then you mostly do it the wrong way...such as in Chapter 47. You squish all of your dialogue into one paragraph which is incorrect. (And it causes many readers to run away LOL) There must be a new paragraph every time a new person speaks.
So I'm done. Whew that took a long time to type up. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed and found my comments useful~
MashiPao
#9
Moving on to the next comment! LOL I don't know...I might hit a new high and have to write three comments. I still have much to say. :P Just a heads up, I read teh sequel too so I'll be squishing everything in the comments here. XD
Anyway, continuing about Tiffany. Thumbs up for continuity. I noticed you still had pink dossiers in your sequel. Hehe sorry I just like it when the author stays consistent. I always have smile on my face every time Tiffany enters the cafe: walks/runs in like a boss then glomps everyone. XD (Also yay for slight Taenyish moment in the sequel haha).
Moving on to the highlight of the story that I found the most amusing: Jessica's and Taeyeon's test to get into Department X. Haha it was great. Cucumbers and roasted cockroaches? Wow. Must've been hell. The examiners weren't very smart when they decided not to tie up Jessica's feet. XD Aso I love the background of the Cafe with No Name. I LOL'd at such the lame name and LOL'd even harder when you said "Taeyeon's creativeness". Nice Touch. :)
Moving on the main plot of the story, I must say the Department X definitely have their feet stuck in a pile of crap. Especially Sooyoung. D: It was so sad when she left. Also, I was so surprised at the end when Seohyun drugged Hyoyeon. Why SEOHYUN? WHY? T_T Honestly, I never expected Seohyun of all people. She's too nice and stuff. But you know, the nicest people are probably the most evil and sinister (Does that make me evil? LOL). Going into the sequel, I wonder if Sunny and Hyomin will really fall in love with each other especially since Hyomin is taking such good care of Sunny in the hospital...while Sunny's lover is sulking around, seeking Tiffany for refuge...Shame, Taeyeon. If Sunny caught you, she might have to request you to get into bed immediately. XD Hehe I'm an avid Taeny fan so I'm content with the Taeny development. :P But anyway, Seohyun, why are you so EVIL?! T_T Evil! D: Augghhh...Well, I'm running out of space again. LOL