Chapter 40

Department X

Jessica roused from her sleep enjoying the comfort and warmth from the sleeping figure beside her.  Sitting up, she reached forward to brush back a strand of hair that fallen between Yuri's eyes and gently bent down to kiss the sleeping angel in front of her. The happenings of the events just now remained fresh in her memories as she remembered the whispered words in her ears. "The promise still stands regardless of who or what you are." She brushed back the tears that had somehow found its way out and smiled. At this point of time, it didn't matter anymore if Yuri was the good guy or the bad guy. She just know that Yuri was someone she loved so much that she would do anything and everything she can to prevent anyone from taking her away. Remembering the words Taeyeon told her over the phone, her brows creased as she struggled to think of all the possibilities that could have happened to have this as a result.

A hand gently reached out and at the furrows between her eyes as the smiling face of Yuri loomed in front of her. Jessica placed her hand over before Yuri could kiss it again and watch as the smile slowly developed into a pout. Jessica leant against the wall behind and patted the empty space beside her. Yuri rested her head on Jessica's shoulder and hugged her waist as Jessica spoke in a serious tone. "Yuri, I need you to think hard of all the enemies you have made previously. I just received a call from Taeyeon that your life is in danger." Yuri frowned a little after hearing what Jessica had said as she slowly starts recollecting the enemies she had made. Raising her thumb she slowly counted "Hmm lets see, there is that one triad boss Shen from HongKong that claimed we shortchanged him the last time by selling him impure blocks and there's that Ashraff from Iraq who blamed us when the guns he bought got hijacked by a rival party after the exchange was made. There's also that Isao guy whom I rejected because he wanted to sell us some weird bomb thingy. Jessica's ears pricked up at the mention of Isao's name. "You were there also? OMG, how could I have missed you. Damn and that stupid Taeyeon claimed she had planted cameras EVERYWHERE." Yuri nodded her head in reply "Yeah, I was there on behalf of my dad to attend some sort of a party and wait...I thought SOMEBODY was visiting her parents." Yuri's voice trailed off as she sat back and stared at Jessica who sheepishly scratched the back of her head as her tongue slowly appeared from between her lips. Yuri took Jessica's hands in her own and stared deeply into her eyes "Lets not lie to each other ever again from today onwards ok?" Jessica smiled as she slowly nodded her head. The two of them looked down unanimously as they slowly felt a thump. It was the sound of their hearts returning back to the void in their chest as it beat together again in unison.

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Jessica slowly held Yuri's hand as she lead her into the cafe. Today was the day Yuri will be properly introduced to the gang as they needed to work out a plan to ensure an all rounded protection was provided from Yuri. Opening the doors to the cafe, Jessica slowly dragged Yuri in as she held on tightly to the door frame. "Are you sure they won't just grab some glock and shoot me right in the face?" Jessica pulled with all her might as she screamed in exasperation "I am the one who usually does the shooting. So if you don't come in now, I will just shoot you myself before anyone can do it." With a final pull, Jesssica forcibly pulled Yuri who was now looking at her with a smirk on the face. "Ah, thats another secret I found out about you. So you are the shooter huh. That explains why you are always the first one to come then." Jessica glowered at Yuri and smacked her hard on the arm as her face rapidly reddened in the process. Taeyeon and Sunny stood a little distance away as they watch the conversation between the two of them and tried their best to contain the laughters that was bursting to come out from within them. Taeyeon reached out a hand and squeezed Sunny's bum as Sunny narrowed her eyes at her and hissed between her teeth. "We have guests here. Behave yourself."

Sooyoung and Yoona ran over to Jessica and Yuri and stretched out their hands expectantly as Jessica shooked her head and stuck out a tongue at them.  "Nope, she didn't prepare any presents for the two of you." Sooyoung ran away pouting and Jessica noticed a movent from the corner of her eyes. Turning to Yuri, she quickly pulled her away from the inching hands of Yoona. "Grab your phone and hold on tight to it before she steals it and installs some virus or trojan horse on it." Remembering the angry Macdonalds customers again, she shuddered as she chased Yoona away.

Turning to face Taeyeon and Sunny, Jessica dragged Yuri over as they hurriedly adjusted their hair and clothings a little and reached out their hands to greet her. Yuri shooked Taeyeon's hand first and when she took Sunny's hand, she narrowed her eyes a little. "You look familiar, have we met somewhere before?" Sunny smiled in reply "Isao's party I guess. That was where I first saw you as you talked to Isao." Yuri creased her brows further as she searches through her memories. "No...I don't thinks thats just it yet. I think I saw you way before Isao's party" Biting on her upper lips, Yuri thought really hard but she just could not seem to place where she had seen Sunny before. A cough from Taeyeon jolted her back to reality as she hurriedly released Sunny's hand and turned back to holding Jessica's.

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colleenorcullo
#1
Chapter 55: SooNa is so sweet T~T
Taengoo311
#2
Chapter 68: Umm why no updates? D:
SunnyandTae
#3
Chapter 32: New reader. Love where it's going. I'm up to the Christmas special and love it. It's written so well. I can't wait to finish :)
badtestament #4
Wuuthraad : Hahaha, well. Not everything will go to their food binges. I will have a part 3 to explain what they did with the money
badtestament #5
Forever9 : Haha, *evil gleams somemore* Maybe I should tell Youngie about your suspicious love for rilakuma.. *rubs hands in glee* YAH dongsaeng, wae you no update childcare chaos... *prepares the darts you loaned me*
Wuuthraad
#6
I now feel bad for Kim Tae Woo, now that he's going to jail and all his cash is going to fund SooNa food binges XD
badtestament #7
Vedasone : Thanks for the comments. =) Really thanks.

Mashipao : I will post my reply on your wall ok?? =D Thanks for reading my fanfic and thanks even more for your detailed comments and improvement suggestions
MashiPao
#8
S: LAST COMMENT! I SWEAR! XD
While reading your story, I noticed the pros and cons of your writing. So I want to give you some advice to make your fic better and your writing overall. :P
First of all, you do research on your topics. Which is really good. it's very easy to tell that you did your research on the guns and whatnot. In fact, would you mind helping me with that kind of stuff? LOl The amount of information within your story (and the gun explanations in the sequel) clearly show the amount of research you did. Few authors do this large amount of research so kudos to you!
Next, you have AMAZING vocabulary and details. ABSOLUTELY AMAZING. Although, your sentences can get a bit awkward at times, it doesn't hide the fact that your details are amazing. However, I think that all the details you have are like a double-edged sword in a sense. It's really great to read a fic with such amazing detail but sometimes it gets...tedious. Your updates are rather short so all I can see is giant paragraph after paragraph. And honestly, it makes me feel like I'm reading an essay instead of a story. So I would recommend maybe taking your giant paragraphs and separating them into smaller ones. That way, it's much easier to read. Not a lot of people want to read giant blocks of text.
Also, your details and whatnot overpower your dialogue. You have more details than you have dialogue. In my opinion, dialogue is what makes a story and fleshes out the characters' personalities. So perhaps add more dialogue into your story?
You have problems writing dialogue as well which is awfully strange because I see you doing it the right way and then you mostly do it the wrong way...such as in Chapter 47. You squish all of your dialogue into one paragraph which is incorrect. (And it causes many readers to run away LOL) There must be a new paragraph every time a new person speaks.
So I'm done. Whew that took a long time to type up. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed and found my comments useful~
MashiPao
#9
Moving on to the next comment! LOL I don't know...I might hit a new high and have to write three comments. I still have much to say. :P Just a heads up, I read teh sequel too so I'll be squishing everything in the comments here. XD
Anyway, continuing about Tiffany. Thumbs up for continuity. I noticed you still had pink dossiers in your sequel. Hehe sorry I just like it when the author stays consistent. I always have smile on my face every time Tiffany enters the cafe: walks/runs in like a boss then glomps everyone. XD (Also yay for slight Taenyish moment in the sequel haha).
Moving on to the highlight of the story that I found the most amusing: Jessica's and Taeyeon's test to get into Department X. Haha it was great. Cucumbers and roasted cockroaches? Wow. Must've been hell. The examiners weren't very smart when they decided not to tie up Jessica's feet. XD Aso I love the background of the Cafe with No Name. I LOL'd at such the lame name and LOL'd even harder when you said "Taeyeon's creativeness". Nice Touch. :)
Moving on the main plot of the story, I must say the Department X definitely have their feet stuck in a pile of crap. Especially Sooyoung. D: It was so sad when she left. Also, I was so surprised at the end when Seohyun drugged Hyoyeon. Why SEOHYUN? WHY? T_T Honestly, I never expected Seohyun of all people. She's too nice and stuff. But you know, the nicest people are probably the most evil and sinister (Does that make me evil? LOL). Going into the sequel, I wonder if Sunny and Hyomin will really fall in love with each other especially since Hyomin is taking such good care of Sunny in the hospital...while Sunny's lover is sulking around, seeking Tiffany for refuge...Shame, Taeyeon. If Sunny caught you, she might have to request you to get into bed immediately. XD Hehe I'm an avid Taeny fan so I'm content with the Taeny development. :P But anyway, Seohyun, why are you so EVIL?! T_T Evil! D: Augghhh...Well, I'm running out of space again. LOL