Chapter 4

Department X

After that short stint in Zurich, Jessica set off, determined to get back quickly and strangle that horrible Taeyeon with her bare hands for making her cancel her vacation plans at the very last minute just to do this mission which Taeyeon could have easily done herself as well.

Reaching Zurich airport, she checked herself in without any baggage and waited for the boarding gates to open. At the very last minute, she suddenly remembered that she had to buy that baby back home some souvenirs, she headed into one of the shops and emerged out with a box of swiss chocolate in hand. It was lucky she remembered this time because the last time she forgot, she had to spend one hell of a day explaining to impatient and rude customers that this is not the hotline for macdonalds delivery and why it had somehow mysteriously crossed over to her cellphone.

"Never get in a hacker's bad book. They can do many scary stuffs to you that is beyond your wildest imagination"

Boarding the plane finally, she took a minute to find her seat and plonked herself down beside this fat and sweaty man who stared at her with his mouth agape. Sighing internally, she told herself that this was gonna be one long flight back.

Glowering at the man beside her for the 3rd time, she deterred his attempts to make small talks with her again. "Argh, why doesn't he just shut up and sleep already" Screaming in her heart, Jessica continue to fix the icy stare at him hoping he will get the message this time. Just then, the seat belt sign popped up signalling that they were about to fly into a course of turbulence. Stopping her glare, Jessica belted up and tried to finally get some rest. Just then she felt herself jostling around as the plane met with a clear air turbulence. Jessica told herself to ignore the sensations she was feeling in her stomach and tried to concentrate on sleeping. Just then she felt the guy beside her placing his left hand on her shoulder and when she turned sharply to look at him, he gave this flirtatious smile and said "Be careful, these turbulence can be very scary." Feeling the anger rise up in her, she rotated herself to face him, grab the hand that he placed on her shoulder and rotated his shoulder away from his body. She felt the ball of his upper arm bone pop out from its socket and watch as his arm falls limply to his side. She turned up the volume on her mp3 as the guy screamed in pain beside her.

Upon arrival, she turned off her mp3 and removed her headphone only to hear the guy sniffling beside her cradling his left arm in his right. Smiling to herself, she disembarked from the plane and headed for the carpark to fetch her car.

It was just another busy day at the cafe as Seohyun and Hyoyeon busied themselves with serving coffee and cakes to the hungry office workers who stopped by for lunch. Jessica stepped in and noticed Sunny clearing tables over at the corner while Taeyeon was nowhere to be seen. Noticing her presence, Yoona left the netbook she was typing on and ran up to Jessica with Sooyoung in tow behind. After dropping the chocolate into their awaiting hands, they ran happily back to their corner to unwrap their present.

Sunny looked up from the table she was clearing and smiled warmly at Jessica. She gave the table a final wipe and headed over to where Jessica was standing and extended out her hand to her. "Hi, you must be Jessica. I am Sunny and thats my sister over there. Sooyoung." Glancing over at Sooyoung who was happily eating the chocolates with Yoona at their little corner, Jessica lifted an eyebrow as she sense that something wasn't right. Looking at Sunny she smiled and motioned to her to sit down at the table nearest to them.

"I hope you don't mind me asking but is Sooyoung..."Her words trailed away as Jessica searched for the correct word to use. The smile on Sunny faded as she spoke, giving Jessica a glimpse into the hell they went through before joining the department.
 

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colleenorcullo
#1
Chapter 55: SooNa is so sweet T~T
Taengoo311
#2
Chapter 68: Umm why no updates? D:
SunnyandTae
#3
Chapter 32: New reader. Love where it's going. I'm up to the Christmas special and love it. It's written so well. I can't wait to finish :)
badtestament #4
Wuuthraad : Hahaha, well. Not everything will go to their food binges. I will have a part 3 to explain what they did with the money
badtestament #5
Forever9 : Haha, *evil gleams somemore* Maybe I should tell Youngie about your suspicious love for rilakuma.. *rubs hands in glee* YAH dongsaeng, wae you no update childcare chaos... *prepares the darts you loaned me*
Wuuthraad
#6
I now feel bad for Kim Tae Woo, now that he's going to jail and all his cash is going to fund SooNa food binges XD
badtestament #7
Vedasone : Thanks for the comments. =) Really thanks.

Mashipao : I will post my reply on your wall ok?? =D Thanks for reading my fanfic and thanks even more for your detailed comments and improvement suggestions
MashiPao
#8
S: LAST COMMENT! I SWEAR! XD
While reading your story, I noticed the pros and cons of your writing. So I want to give you some advice to make your fic better and your writing overall. :P
First of all, you do research on your topics. Which is really good. it's very easy to tell that you did your research on the guns and whatnot. In fact, would you mind helping me with that kind of stuff? LOl The amount of information within your story (and the gun explanations in the sequel) clearly show the amount of research you did. Few authors do this large amount of research so kudos to you!
Next, you have AMAZING vocabulary and details. ABSOLUTELY AMAZING. Although, your sentences can get a bit awkward at times, it doesn't hide the fact that your details are amazing. However, I think that all the details you have are like a double-edged sword in a sense. It's really great to read a fic with such amazing detail but sometimes it gets...tedious. Your updates are rather short so all I can see is giant paragraph after paragraph. And honestly, it makes me feel like I'm reading an essay instead of a story. So I would recommend maybe taking your giant paragraphs and separating them into smaller ones. That way, it's much easier to read. Not a lot of people want to read giant blocks of text.
Also, your details and whatnot overpower your dialogue. You have more details than you have dialogue. In my opinion, dialogue is what makes a story and fleshes out the characters' personalities. So perhaps add more dialogue into your story?
You have problems writing dialogue as well which is awfully strange because I see you doing it the right way and then you mostly do it the wrong way...such as in Chapter 47. You squish all of your dialogue into one paragraph which is incorrect. (And it causes many readers to run away LOL) There must be a new paragraph every time a new person speaks.
So I'm done. Whew that took a long time to type up. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed and found my comments useful~
MashiPao
#9
Moving on to the next comment! LOL I don't know...I might hit a new high and have to write three comments. I still have much to say. :P Just a heads up, I read teh sequel too so I'll be squishing everything in the comments here. XD
Anyway, continuing about Tiffany. Thumbs up for continuity. I noticed you still had pink dossiers in your sequel. Hehe sorry I just like it when the author stays consistent. I always have smile on my face every time Tiffany enters the cafe: walks/runs in like a boss then glomps everyone. XD (Also yay for slight Taenyish moment in the sequel haha).
Moving on to the highlight of the story that I found the most amusing: Jessica's and Taeyeon's test to get into Department X. Haha it was great. Cucumbers and roasted cockroaches? Wow. Must've been hell. The examiners weren't very smart when they decided not to tie up Jessica's feet. XD Aso I love the background of the Cafe with No Name. I LOL'd at such the lame name and LOL'd even harder when you said "Taeyeon's creativeness". Nice Touch. :)
Moving on the main plot of the story, I must say the Department X definitely have their feet stuck in a pile of crap. Especially Sooyoung. D: It was so sad when she left. Also, I was so surprised at the end when Seohyun drugged Hyoyeon. Why SEOHYUN? WHY? T_T Honestly, I never expected Seohyun of all people. She's too nice and stuff. But you know, the nicest people are probably the most evil and sinister (Does that make me evil? LOL). Going into the sequel, I wonder if Sunny and Hyomin will really fall in love with each other especially since Hyomin is taking such good care of Sunny in the hospital...while Sunny's lover is sulking around, seeking Tiffany for refuge...Shame, Taeyeon. If Sunny caught you, she might have to request you to get into bed immediately. XD Hehe I'm an avid Taeny fan so I'm content with the Taeny development. :P But anyway, Seohyun, why are you so EVIL?! T_T Evil! D: Augghhh...Well, I'm running out of space again. LOL