Chapter 7

Department X

Jessica stared forlornly at the food on the table wishing she could glare the cucumbers away. Looking up, she gave the smirking Taeyeon her fiercest glare. Oh how she wish she could wipe that smirk off her face now. Taeyeon had officially declared war on her.

Leaping at Taeyeon with a war cry, the two of them got into a tangle. Ignoring whatever combat techniques they have previously learnt, they clawed and scratched like a pair of angry cats. Grabbing and pulling whatever they could see and biting whenever flesh was shown, it wasn't long before clumps of blond and brown hair were seen flying everywhere, forcibly pulled from their owner's head. The rest of them had tried intervening but the fight was so bad, they barely made out with their lives. So they decided to let them be. After rolling around on the floor for more than 15 minutes, the two of them finally seperated, panting for breath. Taeyeon's clothes were ripped in some places she had scratches all over her forearms and she was nursing a bruised cheek, Jessica didn't come out any better as she nursed a black eye and rubbed gingerly at her head hoping there was no bald spots on her head.

Catching their breath, they glowered at each other. If glares were deadly, the two of them would have died many times before. As they caught their breath, they started seeing the funny side to the matter and they burst out laughing at each others predicament. Taeyeon walked into her room to fetch the first aid kit and sat beside Jessica tending to her wounds. As they stared into each other eyes, they knew that all was forgiven. After tending to their wounds, they looked woefully at all the food spilled on the floor as their stomach growled away hungrily.

It was then that Sunny walked out with Sooyoung and Yoona carrying a huge pot of ramen in their hands. Since the table was destroyed during the fight earlier, they placed it on the floor and sat around it eating from the pot directly.
(According to interviews conducted by the author later in the day, Taeyeon and Jessica swore they saw a halo on Sunny's head as she walked out with that pot of ramen)

When they finally finished clearing the mess they had created, they looked around and saw that Sooyoung and Yoona had already fallen asleep on the couch in the corner. Their arms were wrapped around each other and Yoona had her head nestled in the crook of Sooyoung neck. Shaking their heads, Taeyeon walked to her room again to grab a blanket to cover them.

--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Business remained busy as usual the next day, Jessica was the barista of the day as she ran about the counter making god knows how many cups of cappuccino, lattes & mochas. It wasn't until 2pm when she finally managed to take a breather. Her had barely warmed the seat when the bell tinkled indicating the arrival of a new customer. Jessica stood up from her chair and went behind the counter waiting to take the customer's order. Her eyes widen as she in a breath while observing the stunning beauty of this customer who stood in front of her looking at the menu on top. Her eyes trailed down taking notes of the person in front of her. She has large sparkling eyes and a sharp nose that complement her oval shaped face perfectly. Although she may be a little on the tanned side but it did nothing to decrease the stunning beauty that radiates from within her. Dressed immaculately in a tailored suit, she had fine fine fine written all over her body. Jessica managed to close in time before the customer spoke up, "I don't suppose you guys served ma juice over here right?"

"Nope we don't but if you really want, I am sure we can think of something." Mentally slapping herself, Jessica tore her gaze from the fabulous body in front of her and moved it up onto the customer's smiling face. Ushering the customer to sit down at a table nearest to the counter, Jessica rushed behind to where Taeyeon was, grabbed her by the shoulder and started screaming "Ma, give me some ma juice NOW!" Taeyeon yawned and pointed at the fridge behind her and before she could say anything, Jessica had ran there, threw open the door and sifted through the contents. Pushing the cabbage, carrots and potatoes away, she searched high and low but just could not seem to find any ma. It was then that Taeyeon suddenly remembered that she had thrown the last of it away as it had spoilt the day before. Hearing that, Jessica grabbed Taeyeon's wallet off the counter and rushed out from the back door. Hopping onto the first vehicle she saw, which was Seohyun's bright pink lady bike, Jessica pedalled furiously away towards the nearest convenience stall to buy ma. She returned 15 minutes later, drenched in her own sweat as she placed the glass of freshly grinded ma juice on the table where the customer sat.
 

Like this story? Give it an Upvote!
Thank you!

Comments

You must be logged in to comment
colleenorcullo
#1
Chapter 55: SooNa is so sweet T~T
Taengoo311
#2
Chapter 68: Umm why no updates? D:
SunnyandTae
#3
Chapter 32: New reader. Love where it's going. I'm up to the Christmas special and love it. It's written so well. I can't wait to finish :)
badtestament #4
Wuuthraad : Hahaha, well. Not everything will go to their food binges. I will have a part 3 to explain what they did with the money
badtestament #5
Forever9 : Haha, *evil gleams somemore* Maybe I should tell Youngie about your suspicious love for rilakuma.. *rubs hands in glee* YAH dongsaeng, wae you no update childcare chaos... *prepares the darts you loaned me*
Wuuthraad
#6
I now feel bad for Kim Tae Woo, now that he's going to jail and all his cash is going to fund SooNa food binges XD
badtestament #7
Vedasone : Thanks for the comments. =) Really thanks.

Mashipao : I will post my reply on your wall ok?? =D Thanks for reading my fanfic and thanks even more for your detailed comments and improvement suggestions
MashiPao
#8
S: LAST COMMENT! I SWEAR! XD
While reading your story, I noticed the pros and cons of your writing. So I want to give you some advice to make your fic better and your writing overall. :P
First of all, you do research on your topics. Which is really good. it's very easy to tell that you did your research on the guns and whatnot. In fact, would you mind helping me with that kind of stuff? LOl The amount of information within your story (and the gun explanations in the sequel) clearly show the amount of research you did. Few authors do this large amount of research so kudos to you!
Next, you have AMAZING vocabulary and details. ABSOLUTELY AMAZING. Although, your sentences can get a bit awkward at times, it doesn't hide the fact that your details are amazing. However, I think that all the details you have are like a double-edged sword in a sense. It's really great to read a fic with such amazing detail but sometimes it gets...tedious. Your updates are rather short so all I can see is giant paragraph after paragraph. And honestly, it makes me feel like I'm reading an essay instead of a story. So I would recommend maybe taking your giant paragraphs and separating them into smaller ones. That way, it's much easier to read. Not a lot of people want to read giant blocks of text.
Also, your details and whatnot overpower your dialogue. You have more details than you have dialogue. In my opinion, dialogue is what makes a story and fleshes out the characters' personalities. So perhaps add more dialogue into your story?
You have problems writing dialogue as well which is awfully strange because I see you doing it the right way and then you mostly do it the wrong way...such as in Chapter 47. You squish all of your dialogue into one paragraph which is incorrect. (And it causes many readers to run away LOL) There must be a new paragraph every time a new person speaks.
So I'm done. Whew that took a long time to type up. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed and found my comments useful~
MashiPao
#9
Moving on to the next comment! LOL I don't know...I might hit a new high and have to write three comments. I still have much to say. :P Just a heads up, I read teh sequel too so I'll be squishing everything in the comments here. XD
Anyway, continuing about Tiffany. Thumbs up for continuity. I noticed you still had pink dossiers in your sequel. Hehe sorry I just like it when the author stays consistent. I always have smile on my face every time Tiffany enters the cafe: walks/runs in like a boss then glomps everyone. XD (Also yay for slight Taenyish moment in the sequel haha).
Moving on to the highlight of the story that I found the most amusing: Jessica's and Taeyeon's test to get into Department X. Haha it was great. Cucumbers and roasted cockroaches? Wow. Must've been hell. The examiners weren't very smart when they decided not to tie up Jessica's feet. XD Aso I love the background of the Cafe with No Name. I LOL'd at such the lame name and LOL'd even harder when you said "Taeyeon's creativeness". Nice Touch. :)
Moving on the main plot of the story, I must say the Department X definitely have their feet stuck in a pile of crap. Especially Sooyoung. D: It was so sad when she left. Also, I was so surprised at the end when Seohyun drugged Hyoyeon. Why SEOHYUN? WHY? T_T Honestly, I never expected Seohyun of all people. She's too nice and stuff. But you know, the nicest people are probably the most evil and sinister (Does that make me evil? LOL). Going into the sequel, I wonder if Sunny and Hyomin will really fall in love with each other especially since Hyomin is taking such good care of Sunny in the hospital...while Sunny's lover is sulking around, seeking Tiffany for refuge...Shame, Taeyeon. If Sunny caught you, she might have to request you to get into bed immediately. XD Hehe I'm an avid Taeny fan so I'm content with the Taeny development. :P But anyway, Seohyun, why are you so EVIL?! T_T Evil! D: Augghhh...Well, I'm running out of space again. LOL