Chapter 35

Department X

Andy felt himself being lifted up onto a trolley forcefully pulling him apart from his wife's outstretched hand. She looked unpleased as her brows furrowed the way it always does when she was unhappy about something. Andy tried shouting for them to let him go but no words could out from his mouth. Lights flashed by his eyes as he felt something pressed against his mouth and nose and gushes of air rushed into his lungs inflating them. Amongst the noises around him one caught his attention. It was the voice of his daughter and she was screaming for him as courses of electricity jolted through his body.

Andy opened his eyes slowly and took in his surrounding. He was on an unfamiliar bed as he felt a warm hand gripping his own tightly. He tried turning his head to the side to see who it was but the pain in his chest hurt too much. The figure woke up as she felt her dad's hand curled around hers as started screaming for the doctor. Nurses and doctors rushed in and Andy felt them prying his eyes open as they shone a light that burnt his eyes a bit. Still dazed, he noticed his daughter among the crowd of white and realised that she has been with him all this while.

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Andy sat up on his bed in his villa holding his death certificate in his hand. He laughed at the irony of it, clutching at his chest as the laugh brought spasms of pain that shot through his entire body. The plan had worked as Taecyeon had reported back to him that the boss seemed appeased and had moved on something else that matters. He was glad that he managed to catch Dr Park in time and they had arranged everything for him. Taecyeon had purposely aim a spot lower instead of directly at his heart and the bullet had directly passed through his body without damaging any vital organs. Dr Park and his team were already on standby when Andy was pushed in and had patched him up in no time. Then they had him transfered to a private clinic that was alerted of the situation and a dead body had replaced his own as Yuri made the neccesary cremation arrangement. Outside the door, Yuri was directing the blackwater guards she had hired recently as they busied themselves with setting up perimeter security all round the holiday villa and internally.

"Andy has not shown up for our meeting today. I cannot risk letting him run amok in the city. Send them in to finish the job." Tiffany nodded curtly as she received over the order dossier and headed down to fetch her car. Its time she met up with Taeyeon and the guys.

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Jessica groaned as she headed to vantage point for the execution of her mission. She missed her fiancee badly. Unfortunately for her, her father in law seemed to have taken ill recently and Yuri has no time to accompany her. Sighing, she took out her phone and check to see if there were any sms. Unfortunately there weren't any. Jessica tapped out a short note and hit the send button before putting the phone back into her pocket as she started her survillance on the villa in front of her. She noticed the perimeter security that had been set up and snorted silently. How typical of blackwater security. Jessica corrected herself as she remembered that they now have a more sophiscated name called Academi. Smirking silently to herself, Jessica silently took note of the security system around and waited for nightfall. She was going to have to do this the hard way.

Yuri felt the vibrations of a phone and could not help but let out a small chuckle. It was a message from Jessica "Seobang...I MISS YOU SO SO MUCH!!! (>3<)"  Before she could tap out a reply, a guard alerted her of a breach in the perimeter and she left to check on the camera feed. Yuri rewinded the tape to the timing the guard mentioned he saw something odd and noticed the strands of blond hair that appeared for just a split second before disappearing. Frowning to herself, she somehow had a sense of foreboding doom that was slowly building inside of her after seeing the video feed. Shaking the feeling, she ordered them to turn on the infrared cameras and take pictures of the surrounding forestery that lies around their villa's perimeter. Holding the memory card in her hand, her hands quivered slightly as a frown appeared on her brows. Concentraing on the job at hand, she fed the memory card into the printer in her office as the pictures started printing out. The first and second pictures showed nothing but trees and birds. The last picture however clearly showed a person in black clothings camouflaged in between one of the trees. As the printer slowly printed out her face starting with her blonde hair, Yuri's face grew paler and paler as the face started to form. It was a face she would never forget because it was the face of Jessica.

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colleenorcullo
#1
Chapter 55: SooNa is so sweet T~T
Taengoo311
#2
Chapter 68: Umm why no updates? D:
SunnyandTae
#3
Chapter 32: New reader. Love where it's going. I'm up to the Christmas special and love it. It's written so well. I can't wait to finish :)
badtestament #4
Wuuthraad : Hahaha, well. Not everything will go to their food binges. I will have a part 3 to explain what they did with the money
badtestament #5
Forever9 : Haha, *evil gleams somemore* Maybe I should tell Youngie about your suspicious love for rilakuma.. *rubs hands in glee* YAH dongsaeng, wae you no update childcare chaos... *prepares the darts you loaned me*
Wuuthraad
#6
I now feel bad for Kim Tae Woo, now that he's going to jail and all his cash is going to fund SooNa food binges XD
badtestament #7
Vedasone : Thanks for the comments. =) Really thanks.

Mashipao : I will post my reply on your wall ok?? =D Thanks for reading my fanfic and thanks even more for your detailed comments and improvement suggestions
MashiPao
#8
S: LAST COMMENT! I SWEAR! XD
While reading your story, I noticed the pros and cons of your writing. So I want to give you some advice to make your fic better and your writing overall. :P
First of all, you do research on your topics. Which is really good. it's very easy to tell that you did your research on the guns and whatnot. In fact, would you mind helping me with that kind of stuff? LOl The amount of information within your story (and the gun explanations in the sequel) clearly show the amount of research you did. Few authors do this large amount of research so kudos to you!
Next, you have AMAZING vocabulary and details. ABSOLUTELY AMAZING. Although, your sentences can get a bit awkward at times, it doesn't hide the fact that your details are amazing. However, I think that all the details you have are like a double-edged sword in a sense. It's really great to read a fic with such amazing detail but sometimes it gets...tedious. Your updates are rather short so all I can see is giant paragraph after paragraph. And honestly, it makes me feel like I'm reading an essay instead of a story. So I would recommend maybe taking your giant paragraphs and separating them into smaller ones. That way, it's much easier to read. Not a lot of people want to read giant blocks of text.
Also, your details and whatnot overpower your dialogue. You have more details than you have dialogue. In my opinion, dialogue is what makes a story and fleshes out the characters' personalities. So perhaps add more dialogue into your story?
You have problems writing dialogue as well which is awfully strange because I see you doing it the right way and then you mostly do it the wrong way...such as in Chapter 47. You squish all of your dialogue into one paragraph which is incorrect. (And it causes many readers to run away LOL) There must be a new paragraph every time a new person speaks.
So I'm done. Whew that took a long time to type up. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed and found my comments useful~
MashiPao
#9
Moving on to the next comment! LOL I don't know...I might hit a new high and have to write three comments. I still have much to say. :P Just a heads up, I read teh sequel too so I'll be squishing everything in the comments here. XD
Anyway, continuing about Tiffany. Thumbs up for continuity. I noticed you still had pink dossiers in your sequel. Hehe sorry I just like it when the author stays consistent. I always have smile on my face every time Tiffany enters the cafe: walks/runs in like a boss then glomps everyone. XD (Also yay for slight Taenyish moment in the sequel haha).
Moving on to the highlight of the story that I found the most amusing: Jessica's and Taeyeon's test to get into Department X. Haha it was great. Cucumbers and roasted cockroaches? Wow. Must've been hell. The examiners weren't very smart when they decided not to tie up Jessica's feet. XD Aso I love the background of the Cafe with No Name. I LOL'd at such the lame name and LOL'd even harder when you said "Taeyeon's creativeness". Nice Touch. :)
Moving on the main plot of the story, I must say the Department X definitely have their feet stuck in a pile of crap. Especially Sooyoung. D: It was so sad when she left. Also, I was so surprised at the end when Seohyun drugged Hyoyeon. Why SEOHYUN? WHY? T_T Honestly, I never expected Seohyun of all people. She's too nice and stuff. But you know, the nicest people are probably the most evil and sinister (Does that make me evil? LOL). Going into the sequel, I wonder if Sunny and Hyomin will really fall in love with each other especially since Hyomin is taking such good care of Sunny in the hospital...while Sunny's lover is sulking around, seeking Tiffany for refuge...Shame, Taeyeon. If Sunny caught you, she might have to request you to get into bed immediately. XD Hehe I'm an avid Taeny fan so I'm content with the Taeny development. :P But anyway, Seohyun, why are you so EVIL?! T_T Evil! D: Augghhh...Well, I'm running out of space again. LOL