Chapter 34

Department X

Andy gathered up the neccesary documents as he got ready for the meeting today. Before he left, something inside one of his pocket vibrated stifftening him instantly. Taking the vibrating phone from his pocket, he answered hesitantly only to be greeted by a rushed voice that told him of his fate. Andy smiled as he realised the voice over the end was Taecyeon, a guy he rescued from the streets years and years ago. This boy owed him a favour and now he was returning it.

Taecyeon briefly explained the orders that have been given to him and Andy realise that he could use this to his advantage. Briefly dicussing the plans over with Taecyeon, Andy left knowing that the meeting with his old friend will have to be postponed to a later date. Andy arrived at the carpark and briefly glanced at the cars that were parked there. He smiled to himself as he noticed the two sleek black bmws that was parked at a distance away. The boss had always been slow at distributing the profits but when it came to killing one of his own, he certainly worked fast. Andy shook his head slightly as he thought of his relationship with boss. They grew together in the same village and were closer than some siblings that had blood relations. He was a year older than Andy but their characters were so so different. He was cold, ruthless and completely unscrupulous while Andy was the benign and soft hearted one. When his brother's wife leapt to her death, Andy knew that it was somehow indirectly caused by his brother. The fact shooked him as he came to realise that if his brother could do this to his own wife, he will one day do it to him too. A rift in their relationship was created as a result and Andy secretly came to worry for his brother's children. Luckily for them, they chose to leave their own father. They reminded him of his own daughter as they were around the same age. Hell, they even played together before. Sighing at the thought, Andy muttered a silent prayer for them in his heart as he got in his car and adjusted his rearview mirror to ensure he could see the bmws behind him. Its time for the cameras to roll.

 

==========================================================================================

 

Andy drove along the road as he tried eluding the tails he had. Cutting across 4 lanes on the highway, Andy made a sudden exit causing the cars behind him to screech to a stop and angry horns blared at his direction. The two bmws tried following him but was prevented from doing so as the drivers who couldn't stop in time crashed into one another resulting in a huge build up by the exit. Glad that his evasion driving techniques had work, Andy finally stopped as he parked outside a restaurant downtown and stepped out from his car. Now he could only hope that everything will go on as planned. When he stepped out, he took out his phone in the street and pretend to make a phone call.

Taecyeon laid on the rooftop of the office block that was located on the other side of the road. He love the feel of the Ruger.22 in his hand. Although it may not be as deadly as many of the other models available in the market. It was his favourite gun as it only takes two screws for barrel and the trigger mechanism  to be seperated from the stock. It was light and compact enough for his line of work. He lined up the crrosshair of his Leupold Side Focus scope onto the side of the road where he knew Andy will exit from. He knew that the boss was watching his every action and he silently prayed for Andy's plan to actually work. This was the least he could do to repay Andy's favour. A car drove up and parked at the designated meeting spot as Taecyeon's grip tightened on on the stock of the gun, Curling his finger against the trigger he lined up the shot and fired.

Andy tensed himself up for the bullet he know that will arrive shortly. When itt came, it felt like someone had punched him in the chest hard. He felt the surroundings slant to a side as the colours rapidly drained out of the air turning everything into a black and white movie. The only colour came from a irregular crimson shape on the front of his shirt as it grew rapidly. He saw the screaming mouths of the passing pedestrians but there was no sound emitting from them. The streets tilted more and more until it became upside down. He saw many heads crowded around him and he wish they would go away. From amongst the heads, he saw a face that made him smile, it was his wife. The love of his life had come to take him away as she leant down and reached out a hand. Smiling to himself, Andy smiled and closed his eyes as he reached for the outstretched hand. So this was how it feels to die.

Like this story? Give it an Upvote!
Thank you!

Comments

You must be logged in to comment
colleenorcullo
#1
Chapter 55: SooNa is so sweet T~T
Taengoo311
#2
Chapter 68: Umm why no updates? D:
SunnyandTae
#3
Chapter 32: New reader. Love where it's going. I'm up to the Christmas special and love it. It's written so well. I can't wait to finish :)
badtestament #4
Wuuthraad : Hahaha, well. Not everything will go to their food binges. I will have a part 3 to explain what they did with the money
badtestament #5
Forever9 : Haha, *evil gleams somemore* Maybe I should tell Youngie about your suspicious love for rilakuma.. *rubs hands in glee* YAH dongsaeng, wae you no update childcare chaos... *prepares the darts you loaned me*
Wuuthraad
#6
I now feel bad for Kim Tae Woo, now that he's going to jail and all his cash is going to fund SooNa food binges XD
badtestament #7
Vedasone : Thanks for the comments. =) Really thanks.

Mashipao : I will post my reply on your wall ok?? =D Thanks for reading my fanfic and thanks even more for your detailed comments and improvement suggestions
MashiPao
#8
S: LAST COMMENT! I SWEAR! XD
While reading your story, I noticed the pros and cons of your writing. So I want to give you some advice to make your fic better and your writing overall. :P
First of all, you do research on your topics. Which is really good. it's very easy to tell that you did your research on the guns and whatnot. In fact, would you mind helping me with that kind of stuff? LOl The amount of information within your story (and the gun explanations in the sequel) clearly show the amount of research you did. Few authors do this large amount of research so kudos to you!
Next, you have AMAZING vocabulary and details. ABSOLUTELY AMAZING. Although, your sentences can get a bit awkward at times, it doesn't hide the fact that your details are amazing. However, I think that all the details you have are like a double-edged sword in a sense. It's really great to read a fic with such amazing detail but sometimes it gets...tedious. Your updates are rather short so all I can see is giant paragraph after paragraph. And honestly, it makes me feel like I'm reading an essay instead of a story. So I would recommend maybe taking your giant paragraphs and separating them into smaller ones. That way, it's much easier to read. Not a lot of people want to read giant blocks of text.
Also, your details and whatnot overpower your dialogue. You have more details than you have dialogue. In my opinion, dialogue is what makes a story and fleshes out the characters' personalities. So perhaps add more dialogue into your story?
You have problems writing dialogue as well which is awfully strange because I see you doing it the right way and then you mostly do it the wrong way...such as in Chapter 47. You squish all of your dialogue into one paragraph which is incorrect. (And it causes many readers to run away LOL) There must be a new paragraph every time a new person speaks.
So I'm done. Whew that took a long time to type up. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed and found my comments useful~
MashiPao
#9
Moving on to the next comment! LOL I don't know...I might hit a new high and have to write three comments. I still have much to say. :P Just a heads up, I read teh sequel too so I'll be squishing everything in the comments here. XD
Anyway, continuing about Tiffany. Thumbs up for continuity. I noticed you still had pink dossiers in your sequel. Hehe sorry I just like it when the author stays consistent. I always have smile on my face every time Tiffany enters the cafe: walks/runs in like a boss then glomps everyone. XD (Also yay for slight Taenyish moment in the sequel haha).
Moving on to the highlight of the story that I found the most amusing: Jessica's and Taeyeon's test to get into Department X. Haha it was great. Cucumbers and roasted cockroaches? Wow. Must've been hell. The examiners weren't very smart when they decided not to tie up Jessica's feet. XD Aso I love the background of the Cafe with No Name. I LOL'd at such the lame name and LOL'd even harder when you said "Taeyeon's creativeness". Nice Touch. :)
Moving on the main plot of the story, I must say the Department X definitely have their feet stuck in a pile of crap. Especially Sooyoung. D: It was so sad when she left. Also, I was so surprised at the end when Seohyun drugged Hyoyeon. Why SEOHYUN? WHY? T_T Honestly, I never expected Seohyun of all people. She's too nice and stuff. But you know, the nicest people are probably the most evil and sinister (Does that make me evil? LOL). Going into the sequel, I wonder if Sunny and Hyomin will really fall in love with each other especially since Hyomin is taking such good care of Sunny in the hospital...while Sunny's lover is sulking around, seeking Tiffany for refuge...Shame, Taeyeon. If Sunny caught you, she might have to request you to get into bed immediately. XD Hehe I'm an avid Taeny fan so I'm content with the Taeny development. :P But anyway, Seohyun, why are you so EVIL?! T_T Evil! D: Augghhh...Well, I'm running out of space again. LOL