Pick Up

I Want You

Author: TAOpandy

Reviewer: BFInspirit20

Title: 5/5

Short, sweet, and fits into the storyline perfectly! It really defines Dara's feelings toward Jiyong, without giving the whole story away. Good job!

Foreword + Description: 8/10

Being honest, the forward and description seem a little long, but I understand that need to be long to explain the plot, so I won't take points off for that. The two things that I'm taking points off for are: the font of the character description, the font is too close together and a bit hard to read. And a few grammatical errors. Other than that, good job!

Style + Design: 4/5

The font size in the chapters are very easy to read, so there's no problem there. I only took a point off for the poster: I love the color and style, but I thought that Yongguk would be on it too, since he's a main character, Good job overall!

Plot: 28/30

I really like the plot of this story! Although it may seem cliche, I love stories involving a love triangle, and trying to move on from your first love: it's so real as well as heartbreaking for the lead going through so many emotions! Dara is my favorite member from 2NE1, and BYG is my favorite member from B.A.P, and placing G-Dragon just adds to the fun! I love seeing the characters develop, and I really can't wait to see what happens next, especially now that BYG and Dara are dating! How will Jiyong react? I must know!

Characterization: 15/15

Although it may upset some readers, I love how you don't give away Jiyong's true feelings, it adds more flare to the story. I love BYG and I was rooting for him and Dara from the beginning: he truly is good for her, and Jiyong needs to open his eyes and discover his true feelings quick before he looses his chance! (I loved Jaejoong's cameo as well). Well done!

Grammar + Spelling: 16/20

There's quite a few spelling errors in each chapter. Take some time to read your chapters over and check for mistakes. Other than that, your grammar is good. Well done!

Flow: 10/10

The story is progressing well: not too fast, not too slow. No problems here!

Overall Enjoyment: 4/5

I really love this story: a classic storyline with some awesome twists and turns! I wish that I could read more!

Overall Score: 90/100

A/N: Wow! Because you received a 90, your story has the opportunity to be featured in the featured story corner!! Awesome! I truly like this story, the characters are awesome, and I love the love triangle!

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