Review:

Coup D'état

Author: LoveX2254

Reviwer: DobuOnew

♥ TITLE  5/5

Wow, it’s the first time I’m giving a full score in this section. First, I like the fact you used another language besides English on the title. It makes it more creative. Second, I like it because it’s a song title, though it’s getting overused to name stories with song titles. Third, I can relate the song to the story and the title to the plot. So full score for you! ^^

♥ FOREWORD + DESCRIPTION  8.5/10

The description is really good. It doesn’t give much information about the plot and it’s well written, I think, as well as it fits the story/plot. In my opinion, the definition of Faceless and that text could have been put in the description, and then in the foreword you could explain why you felt like writing this story or what inspired you to do so; you could put more or less an author note about your fanfic in general. The font type is good, the size and color too, though you could do it more beautiful, but it’s not bad in this way.

♥ STYLE + DESIGN  4/5

You have no background, so I can’t judge it. The poster relates to the story, it gives this “state of war” feeling and the fact of being Luhan the only EXO member there, quickly alerts us about who will be part of the main characters. Though it’s good, it could have been better.

The font is at a good size and its color doesn’t hurt the readers’ eyes. I like the fact you put a different font type in the beginning of every chapter, as if it’s like some kind of short diary that the OC has every day.

 ♥ PLOT  29/30

I like the plot. It’s something new for me as I haven’t read anything similar to this. Well, the fact of EXO being the bad guys adds some points to it, as usually they’re always the good ones and the heroes. In your story they’re the bad ones and it pleases me knowing that I can read different sides of them.

It makes relieved seeing a plot different than the usual “girl falls in love with boy” plot. Yours speaks about society; a society that is in a war, which is in some way happening right now in our current world. It’s somehow similar to what Syria, Isreal and those countries are going through: a coup d’état. 

Well, in my point of view, your fanfic portraits the society of nowadays as there is a dictator (in the case of the countries above mentioned – their governors) and there is the group of people fighting for the end of the dictatorship, which is the Faceless and in our society the “Faceless” are the citizens, called the rebels.

I don’t think anyone can write about these issues. Maybe it wasn’t even your intention to put into a fanfic what’s happening in the world at the moment, but that was how I viewed it. Although it might have been a simple idea that popped in your mind (I’m just saying as I don’t know if it really was or not), I find it extremely good and I think it was of a big courage to grab this plot and write about it.

I have big expectations for this story as it’s yet in its start and the plot itself is very interesting. So I’m anticipating the next chapters as anything can happen now.

♥ CHARACTERIZATION  10/15

Well, I can’t say much as your story has just started, so I can’t take many conclusions of the characters. I can see that the OC is a strong girl willing to risk her life for the others as she doesn’t have anything to lose.

About the others I really can’t say anything as they haven’t been in the scene long enough for me to analyze their personality. I can only see that Luhan isn’t much in favor of killing and that makes him somehow the weak point of the militia. About the Chief, I somehow would like if he turned out to be OC’s father but well, it’s yours story and I don’t want to influence you in any way (relatively to the plot).

♥ GRAMMAR + SPELLING  18/20

I hardly saw any misspelled mistakes, which is very good. The grammar was also great. Your writing is descriptive and that being said, when the author describes the scenes with many details and comparisons, it gives another feeling to the story and the reader will imagine the scenes in their heads, which is a great help to comprehend the story.

♥ FLOW  8.5/10

It has only been five chapters yet, but I think the flow has been at a good pace. Though I feel it a bit fast in some parts.

♥ OVERALL ENJOYMENT  4/5

Though I only read five chapters (the ones which are available) I got interested by this story already. Not only because of the plot, but the writing also helps. I’m really anticipating the next chapters. :)  

♥ OVERALL SCORE:  87/100

a/n: You said that writing fantasy, dystopian and anything other than romance and fluff was out of your comfort zone, but I have to admit that you’re doing a great job. Though these kind of fanfics (in my opinion) tend to be more descriptive, I think you’re on the way, so don’t worry.

I saw an improvement from the last story I reviewed from you, so I must applaud you for that. I feel happy to review one of your works again, though these genres are also out of my comfort zone, as I’m not really into dystopian and fantasy, I tried my best on reviewing your story.

Thank you for requesting at our shop and keep up with the good work! I hope you liked the review. Please don’t forget to read the reminder. Fighting!

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