Review:

I'm His Baby's Mama

Author: BBCnTSFAM

Reviwer: BFInspirit20

♥ TITLE 5/5

This title made me laugh out loud: I love how unique it is! Also it's short, sweet and easy to remember. Good job!

♥ FOREWORD + DESCRIPTION  7/10

I'll be honest and say that I was pretty confused with the foreword and description. I like how you showed the future in the description and the past + prologue in the foreword, but I really didn't know what to expect. The description followed the title, so good job there, but the foreword was a scene that didn't tie in to the plot, it kind of felt like a random passage. I think that the foreword should have been put as the first chapter, not only because of the length, but because the foreword is used to put a small synopsis of the story, not a full chapter.
Other than that, at first glance it looks like a really entertaining story!

♥ STYLE + DESIGN  5/5

The font is at a good enough size where it's easy to read and easy to follow, so good job there, but make sure to only add a space between paragraphs for a transition of time (Day to night, from today to tomorrow, one couple to another, etc). I absolutely ADORE your poster (I love the ones that can move!), and the colors really fit the light theme of the story. And since Myungsoo is one of the main characters and he is on the poster looking adorable, you get extra points in my book! Awesome job, everything looks great!

♥ PLOT  28/30

Oh shoot, Naeun meets her old nemesis Kim Myungsoo, and she gets pregnant even though they hate each other?! DRAMA!  I also love how their relationship is so awkward, but how they slowly start to trust one another , just like a real pregnant woman and her... baby daddy?.(Chapter 7 is proof of my point, and may I say I loved that chapter)! I also love how you don't just show their relationship, but also Woohyun and Chorong's as well! Her hatred for him is awesome, I love it! And by the way, I FLIPPED when Myungsoo asked if they should marry, and almost had a fangirl attack when he said he liked her! Ahhh my feels! <3

I took off points because this story isn't quite done yet, but I really can't wait to see how it everything plays out,I love reading this story!

♥ CHARACTERIZATION  13/15

I love all of the characters, they seem so real with their emotions! Chorong is the coolest character ever, not wanting to play into Woohyun's games and not being afraid to show her irritation. Woohyun is the classic Nam Grease, and I love it. Myungsoo may not seem to care, but deep down, he truly loves Naeun enough to enjoy the "night" he spent with her, and let her life with him for the duration of her pregnancy. (Plus, his little moments with her are so cute, oh my gosh!!!!!) All of the characters are awesome, I can't even choose a favorite! You truly portray how pregnancy affects a couple and the people around them. Well done!
 

♥ GRAMMAR + SPELLING 16/20

Your spelling is correct at most points, just make sure to spell check after writing each chapter. It's the sentence structure that I took the points off for. It may not seem like a big deal, but depending on how you put quotations for your characters can make it flow. Remember: Whenever one character speaks and it switches to another character, start a new paragrah, that way we know who's talking.

Example:

"What? My mom knew about my big day"? He asked as Naeun nodded. "Yes, she always updated me on your daily life". She answered. Myungsoo looked down and  his lips quickly.
"Tell me the details". He pleaded. She looked at him and shook her head. "There's so much. I can't just tell you now-"

Should be:

"What? My mom knew about my big day"? He asked as Naeun nodded.

"Yes, she always updated me on your daily life". She answered.

Myungsoo looked down and his lips quickly. "Tell me the details". He pleaded.

She looked at him and shook her head. "There's so much. I can't just tell you now-"

Spacing out each paragraph by character really helps the story flow better, and makes it easier to read. Other than that, good job!

♥ FLOW  9/10

The story is progressing well except or one thing: the time Naeun found out she was pregnant. We ere told that she found out at 9 weeks, which is ok, but you never explained what happened during that time frame. Also, 9 weeks seems like a pretty long time, but then again, it's a good point to see the true development of a possible child. Other than that, the story is progressing well!

♥ OVERALL ENJOYMENT  5/5

I am LOVING this story, it is so cute and funny, plus I love all the characters! I really wan to see what happens next, will she accept his feelings, and will Chorong and Woohyun have a romantic moment between each other?! Can't wait to read more!!!
 

♥ OVERALL SCORE:  88/100

A/N: So close, but because you did not receive a 90 or above, your story cannot be featured in the featured story corner. But don't worry, you still received a pretty high score for this awesome story! I personally enjoy this story, so I will stay subscribed to you so I can see what happens next! Don't break my feels author-him!

Thank you so much for requesting a review, and me as your reviewer: I had a lot of fun reading and reviewing this story so thank you! I can't wait to see what happens next in this story, and hopefully we'll see you here again real soon! Thanks again and take care sweetie! :D

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