Phantom Crimes
Review Requested By: theslyfox
Reviewer: rectangular_smile
Review Requested: August 14th, 2015
Review Completed & Posted: August 23rd, 2015
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Title (10/10)
I really liked your title. It was unique and pretty much relevant to the story. Simply saying, your title was amazing and don't change it.

Foreword (18/20)
The foreword was perfect. Pretty much small and filling. I was really into it and it gave me so much information about who's who and what's gonna happen next, but at the same time, not revealing much to give out the entire plot.
There were a lot of grammatical mistakes in your character introduction and the foreword though, and I suggest you fix them A.S.A.P, because it makes the reader cringe and leave the page immediately without giving the story a chance.

Characters (20/20)
The interaction Kyungsoo had with every person in the story was plain perfect and filling. To be honest I really like ghosts stories and I like this story a lot. The conversation he has with Suho is heartwarming and I just like them.

Narrative Elements (29/30)
As I said, I like ghost stories, which means I have read a few. The plot in the first chapters were similar to the other stories I have read and you could have used more original ideas. The unique thing about your story is that they turn up to be police who help people out, which is new. Mostly the stories I've read the life of the protagonist focuses only on his high school days and how rebellious he/she is. Your story is plain unique and I have nothing more to say.

Plot & Theme (20/35)
The plot is amazing, even though ghost stories aren't new and slightly over-used. I still find your story different in a lot of things.
However, the grammar mistakes bothered me so much. I won't say I'm the best person in grammar but your story held a lot of mistakes that I couldn't shrug out. It made me stop so many times and wonder if I should just ditch the story - sorry - so you need to fix them A.S.A.P.

Entertainment Factors (10/10)
I like the story, it was plain perfect. I really enjoyed the story and you have so much potential in writing one. I even liked how you managed to make a name of D.O 'demon obsessor' it was really cool!

Overall Score (102/120) *This story has been added to the Hall of Fame*

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