Our Twisted Destiny
Requested by: eudoramp
Reviewer: Yoon_Jeonghan
Review Requested: July 22nd, 2015
Review Completed & Posted: July 24th, 2015
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Title: (6/10)
The title sounds cliche, not really creative but it works well with the story, I couldn't really think of a better name for it. It actually had me thinking about the plot. I thought the story was going to be about a bad break-up but turns out it wasn't.

Foreword: (13/15)
Very misleading foreword, I love it. Before I read the story, I thought it was the same old cliche where a boy falls in love and he ends up having a bad break-up, but the foreword gave me chills, especially the character description underneath it where it says "The man who lives in a cabin deep in the forest." Evokes many emotions and actually gave me goosebumps.

Characters: (18/20)
Character description was on point. I loved the way the author describes Seunghyun, almost making him seem feminine. The character description was written beautifully and I really like how the author describes his nose and lips as addicting, which really is true. Character development was also great. I really liked how Jiyong never gave up his love for Seunghyun despite the amount of time that had passed, shows what love can really do to you. 

Narative Elements: (22/30)
 The delivery of point of views were written well. It wasn't confusing, however, I do believe that the author should read over her work as there were a lot of grammatical errors. For example using present tense when past tense should be used. The description of setting was really a sweet. The scene where Seunghyun takes Jiyong to the cliff that looks over the city was really heart-warming. The way the author describe the scenery fit well with the emotions the characters were feeling, making the scene more romantic.

Plot and Theme: (27/35)
The themes the author used were love and death/ supernatural being. It was a great combination as it sort of represents reality where love can make one delusional. It gave me goosbumps because the scene where Jiyong realizes Seunghyun was dead, gave me the chills as it was creepy yet bittersweet. On another note, I think theauthor should extend on how or why Jiyoung fell in love with Seunghyun. Was it his gentle nature or good looks? 

Entertainment Factors: (8/10)
Overall, I think oneshot was well written. There was a lot of description which was great as it allows the audience to connect with how the characters feel and imagine what they see and experience. I really enjoyed it because it was bittersweet, heart-warming yet at the same time creepy.

Overall Score: (94/120)

REVIEWER'S NOTE:
I really enjoyed this oneshot and I really recommend it to the readers. However, I think all the author really needs to do is edit her work. It was really well written and I applaud her for her great imagination and for coming up with a great plot.

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