Circus
Requested By: DivinestSense
Reviewer: -theunniefangirl
Review Requested: July 17th, 2015
Review Completed & Posted: July 26th, 2015
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This review came out almost ten days after it was requested RIP me 

Title (8/10)
The title is pretty good. I definitely like how short and simple it is. But it bugs me how It's called "Circus" and not "The Circus" RIP idk why I just really read into titles, lol

Foreword (12/15)
Mostly everything was fine but I feel like the first summary-ish-thingy in the black font revealed too much with the poem. I think leaving the poem gives a good enough description of what will happen in the story. It also has a mysterious vibe to it that keeps the readers captivated. The summary just ruins the feel in all honesty. 

With the poem readers will be left urging to find out more- who these people are, how the main OC falls into the story, etc. 

Characters (16/20)
One thing I really want to applaud you for is that you kept the personalities of the EXO members. For some reason, in fanfics on this website, they always make the idols OOC, but you actually made them... like themselves.

I really like Yerin! She's realistic and actually enjoyable. I love how, through all of this, you still made her a KPop fangirl. I can see how realistic and understandable she is.

Your characters are very dynamic - I can love some, and I can hate some. Sehun*sorry* As of right now, Jongdae/Chen is favorite character. My least favorite is Sehun. I just dislike how much of a douche bag he is. I'm happy the Serin (Sehun X Yerin) ship is sinking. #TeamYeSoo4Lyfe

Narrative Elements (20/30)
Your writing style is fine. I didn't really see you mess up with punctuation or anything.

Here are some things you should look at:
-Tenses
You were constantly slipping in between present tense. I understand that keeping tenses is a hard thing to do - I mess up all the time.
Note:
Had: Past Tense
Has: Present Tense
Basically, remember: '-ing' is present tense, and '-ed' is usually past tense.

Plot and Theme (35/35)
Your story is one of the most original fics on this website. I have yet to see a story like this. And that's coming from me - the leader of the cliche police.

Entertainment Factors (10/10)
Your story had me intrigued. I read on to every next chapter. I just really enjoyed it. 
Author-nim! Fighting!

Overall Score (105/120) **This story has been added to the Hall of Fame**

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