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title: 4/5
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It doesn't make people that interested, I don't think they'll definitely choose your story to read when they read the title.
foreword and description: 8/10
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Its not that convincing to let readers want to carry on reading the story once they looked at the foreword.
appearance: 4/5
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The poster is a little plain, but the story layout is fine.
plot: 12/15
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Its very similar to a lot of stories I've read.
originality: 8/15
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There's a lot of stories with the same plot.
grammar and spelling: 18/20
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It could be better. For example, for chapter one,
it says 'You saw him still running to catch up to you, hair blowing in the wind, face puffed up catching his breath.'
When it should be 'You saw him running towards you, trying to catch up to you. His hair was blowing in the wind, while his face was puffed up from catching his breath.'
The other one, you put
'Finally, class ended and you rushed to your locker to dump your stuff down and go get some lunch.'
when it should be 'Finally, class ended and you rushed to your locker to dump your stuff inside, then proceeded to get some lunch.'
Another one.. Its not grammar.
you put '"Okay... Oppa Chen." you smiled your best smile.'
When it was supposed to be '"Okay... Chen oppa." you gave him your best smile.' yeah, I don't know if its the character's saying but.. yeah I prefer it that way.
you put 'You turned around in fright and found 3 girls staring you down with evil glares.'
when it should be 'You turned around in fright, finding 3 girls staring at you with their devious glares.'
it says 'You saw him still running to catch up to you, hair blowing in the wind, face puffed up catching his breath.'
When it should be 'You saw him running towards you, trying to catch up to you. His hair was blowing in the wind, while his face was puffed up from catching his breath.'
The other one, you put
'Finally, class ended and you rushed to your locker to dump your stuff down and go get some lunch.'
when it should be 'Finally, class ended and you rushed to your locker to dump your stuff inside, then proceeded to get some lunch.'
Another one.. Its not grammar.
you put '"Okay... Oppa Chen." you smiled your best smile.'
When it was supposed to be '"Okay... Chen oppa." you gave him your best smile.' yeah, I don't know if its the character's saying but.. yeah I prefer it that way.
you put 'You turned around in fright and found 3 girls staring you down with evil glares.'
when it should be 'You turned around in fright, finding 3 girls staring at you with their devious glares.'
flow: 10/10
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I liked the flow, it flowed pretty well! But for the first chapter, you shouldn't tell the readers the classes one by one, it gets boring.
characterization: 10/10
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The characters are great, but I don't really like 'me', I mean, in the story, her personality is confusing O_O
overall enjoyment: 10/10
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Its easy to read, nuff' said.
total: 82/100
reviewer: babycorn
reviewer's note: Sorry for the wait!
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