❊ taeng99
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❊ indebted innocence
title: 5/5
I like your use of alliteration and how it goes along well with your story.
foreword and description: 8/10
You did a good job of leaving that air of mystery around the story. It didn't give to much away, but it also gave a nice view of the story. I think a few pictures of the characters may have added to it. I don't know if it's just me, but i had a hard time imagining Taeyeon as a guy. >.<
appearance: 5/5
Your poster and background played nicely with the angst feel of your fanfic. I liked how the flashbacks were in italics; it makes it easier to follow.
plot: 12/15
So far, there's not enough for me to rate your *entire* plot, but from what i'm seeing it's going to continue the dark storyline. Your use of flashbacks made the plot quite interesting, exposing secrets as you go. It was a little awkward to open with a scene though. If i were you, i would have opened with the flashback scene right after that.
originality: 12/15
I thought your use of characters was pretty original. I was a little disappointed with the typical sister relationship Jessica and Krystal had. Since your story was a dark one, i thought Jessica would have been in a more isolated position.
grammar and spelling: 17/20
I only spotted a few typos, but you did have some grammar mistakes. "A gain" is one word--"Again." You made this mistake twice. There were also a few times when you added extra prepositions that weren't needed. This isn't necessarily a grammar mistake, but it helps with the flow of the story. "a hand grazed against her bare shoulders" for example, the "against" isn't necessary.
flow: 10/10
Your story flows really nicely because of your use of flashbacks. Once you say something, it's like a flashback explains why it happened.
characterization: 8/10
I like the mystery you put around some of your characters like Yul and Taeyeon. I was a little disappointed with Krystal's personality though. As i said previously, i think it would have helped the story if Jessica and Krystal didn't have the nice relationship they did.
overall enjoyment: 8/10
It's my first time reading a genderbender story, haha. It took me a little while to get used to, but overall i liked your story.
total: 85/100
reviewer: dr3amer
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