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title: 3/5
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honestly, it wasn't that eye-catchy. but it does suit your story well. also, it's somehow wrong. you should have just titled it 'the legendary mixed blood' or something like that. 'legendary' alone sounds awkward, that's why.
foreword and description: 8/10
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It was good, since you explained some terms well. i just found some errors, like the first sentence of your second paragraph. it isn't a complete thought, which made it a fragment.
appearance: 5/5
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i love the poster! you also wrote the story neatly.
plot: 12/15
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the plot was good, something really exciting. it was complicated and somehow unique, but yeah, it was a bit confusing.
originality: 13/15
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i've read a story with the same concept, but yours is different. the thing about the rune stones was good. also, the fact that the 12 don't know about their past until they met the spirits was also a good twist.
grammar and spelling: 12/20
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the first thing i saw was your inconsistency of tenses. i suggest you to use past tense since you're using 3rd pov. it's easier to use. i also encountered some typos.
you wrote: 'although her hair could not be seen since she was wearing a black cloak.'
this is a fragment. i saw a few more errors of this kind. you should have connected it with the next sentence.
you wrote: '... to also find out whom's behind these unknown and sudden attacks.'
correction: '... to also find out who's behind these unknown and sudden attacks.'
you wrote: 'of course he does dearest.'
correction: 'of course, he does, dearest.'
you wrote: 'follow me you can stay at my house.'
correction: 'follow me. you can stay at my house.'
you wrote: 'haven't being in this form for so long, now that i'm in this form, i kind of miss being in this form.'
correction: 'haven't been in this form for so long. now that i'm in this form, i kind of miss being like this.'
avoid using a term too much.
flow: 5/10
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the flow was too fast. i didn't catch up easily with the scenes. there were also scenes that weren't that important. those parts sort of affected the story's flow.
characterization: 6/10
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I find the characters the same. i didn't see much differences between them. try to develop strong traits that will make each person stand out from the rest.
overall enjoyment: 5/10
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I was excited at first, since i really like the idea of exo having powers. but i didn't enjoy your story as much as i've expected. anyways, good luck!
total: 69/100
reviewer: thederpchanyeol
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