Title : 4/5

It’s not long, not short. It’s a really nice title. I’ve seen a few other stories with the same name.

Foreword and Description : 6/10

You needn’t to tell your readers that you’re not a fan of the pairing you’re writing about. It makes me think that it won’t be a great story. The description isn’t my cup of tea. It throws me off a bit and I don’t understand it well.

Appearance : 2/5

Plot : 15/15

I loved it! It was great! It makes me want to know more and more. I was really hoping there was more to the story. It was amazing.

Originality : 10/15

I haven’t really seen any stories like this. It was great. It keeps me excited mostly throughout it.

Grammar and Spelling : 17/20

You’re grammar was beautiful. There were like 4 errors but the rest was perfect. I’ve never seen such good grammar on stories. Spelling was great. Punctuation was outstanding.

Flow : 10/10

For a one shot this was great as well.

Characterization : 9/10 

You did very well.

Overall Enjoyment : 8/10

I enjoyed it a lot. I don’t know what else to say.

Total : 81/100

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E.G.'s notes!

hi! i'm E.G.! i'm here to remind you of crediting the shop and the reviewer. i'll keep an eye on your stories! /mehrong

thanks for requesting! :)