You should request from a layout shop. And next time, don't ever forget to capitalize the initials of people's names! 

Appearance: 2/5

There aren't any kind of graphics and the foreword is pretty messy too. But I give bonus points since my stories are pretty messed up too. xD

Plot: 12/15

I like it! But in Chapter 1, Tiffany (who lived in Korea) called Nicole (who lived in Singapore); which is an unrealistic scene because it'd cost a lot. She should've e-mailed Nicole instead. 

Originality: 10/15

I have a feeling that there are stories similar to this one, but this is the first one I read.

Grammar/Spelling: 10/20

There are some grammar mistakes. And you shouldn't put a space behind a comma, dot, or any punctuation mark unless you're making some kind of masterlist or character chart.

Characterization: 7/10

I recommend you to use a character chart.

Flow: 9/10

Your story is really cute! But there are some dragging scenes.

Overall Enjoyment: 8/10

Total: 64/100