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title: 3/5
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omg, I loved it, hands down. At first, people may think that it'd be an angsty story where a character looks for a lost love, etc... however, your story was the complete opposite. I just loved it.
However, it wouldn't be something that would instantly make me click on the story if it was in between other titles, you know? My first impression would be that it would be incredibly cliché.
foreword and description: 9/10
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It was alright, but there was one thing that really irked me. Rather than using a coma right after boyfriend, it'd be better to finish the pause with another dash.
O: ... he still does not have a date- or a boyfriend, so he makes a list...
S: ... he still does not have a date - or a boyfriend - so he makes a list...
Also, make sure you have a space after the ellipses (...)
O: Yoseob is fine with ending up with anyone on the list...as long...
S: Yoseob is fine with ending up with anyone on the list... as long...
appearance: 5/5
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plot: 12/15
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The plot was cute and funny, but not something new in the fanfic world.
originality: 10/15
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... it wasn't very 'refreshing' to read. I've just read a lot of stories with the same plot as yours.
grammar and spelling: 18/20
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You had really good grammar and spelling, nothing major, but some things kind of made my eye twitch.
For example, on chapter one, you capitalized 'Number One Enemy'... I don't really understand why you did that. I mean, it'd have more emphasis and effect if you bolded it instead.
You also tended to use a lot of comas. It wasn't that they were misused, but overused. You really didn't need to add in that many... I mean... just take some comas out since you already used the word 'and' before and after it.
Also, you suddenly changed over to Trebuchet MS on chapter three. Try sticking to the same font.
flow: 10/10
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characterization: 9/10
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The fact that Yoseob and Kikwang began to be quite friendly with each other so fast kind of baffled me. In the description, you made Kikwang sound extremely cocky and arrogant, but in the story, he seemed like a sweetheart.
overall enjoyment: 7/10
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I'm more of a dooseob shipper (x
total: 83/100
reviewer: channicki
reviewer's notes:
It was a nice story overall (: Definitely made me laugh in some parts.
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