Title: 5/5
It caught my attention.  If I was scrolling down the table of contents, I would click on this one.

Description/Foreword: 8/10
Since the description and foreword are the same as the last review, I will just copy and paste for this section.  
Since this is a oneshot collection, there isn’t really much to comment on specifically.  First, I’d suggest looking through all of the pictures you’ve posted in the description again.  Some links have expired, so you should either replace them or just delete them.  Also, while it is nice to see all of the pairings listed, it isn’t really necessary.  If it is all mentioned in the table of contents, you don’t need a listing of pairings.

Poster/Background: —/10
There is no graphic for this oneshot, so it won’t be counted.

Characterization: 13/15
While there isn’t much mentioned about each individual character, your characters are believable enough to pass as real people.  Personally, I wished that you included more about each distinct character, but a oneshot can only do so much without dragging on.  

Spelling/Grammar: 18/20
There isn’t anything as a whole to point out, but there are a few careless mistakes here and there.  Proofreading would help catch these mistakes.

Flow: 10/10
The flow was very smooth.  The fact that you managed to link the first scene with the ending scene was clever as well.

Originality/Plot: 15/25
The whole plotline was predictable, which made the story less enjoyable.  If you had added more plot twists, you would have increased your originality.  Plot twists make a cliche prompt original, and I would’ve liked to see more of them in your writing.  Otherwise, your plot will be the same as a lot of the other plotlines on the site.

Enjoyment: 5/5
Yes, it was enjoyable.

Total: 74/90 → 82/100

General Comments:
Compared to the other request, I can see how you’ve improved in your writing.  You are proof that if someone practices writing, improvement will be shown.  Although this one didn’t score as high as the other twoshot did, you are still a very good writer.  Thank you for requesting a review, and sorry that it took so long to complete.