I will be reviewing Chapter 5.



Title: 5/5


Eye catching, especially for people who enjoy reading .



Description/Foreword: 9/10


Everything is written correctly and with perfect grammar too.  
The only thing that catches my eye is the fact that “all chapters contain of different degrees and vulgar language.  other warnings will occur when necessary” isn’t capitalized.



Poster/Background: 8/10


The poster seems a bit too happy for the genre, honestly.

Characterization: 13/15


Since it’s a oneshot, there isn’t really any time to develop the characters well.  You don’t give out much information about your OC, but I like that.  It gives the readers room for imagination when you don’t give out every single detail--although others might say likewise.
  The only gripe that I have is the last part with Jessica Jung.



Spelling/Grammar: 18/20


There aren’t many things to fix because you know grammar very well.  Overall, I am impressed with the high quality of writing here.  Minus the occasional comma error, the grammar is well done.



Flow: 9/10


The POV changes make things a little sloppy here and there, but there isn’t anything too major.  I could keep up with the story well.



Originality/Plot: 20/25


Since the genre is PWP, it’s a bit difficult to grade the plot.  I can say that it’s planned out well, and I can see the improvement with each new chapter.  
As for originality, there are many stories like this posted on the site.  What you have that at least half of the other writers don’t is your knowledge of the English language.  
Enjoyment: 5/5


One of very few fanfictions where you can tell that the author cares about what she writes.



Total: 87/100


Bonus: 5/5


Your grammar is stellar.



Grand Total: 92/100


General Comments:


Congratulations on being the third person to get an A score!  I think that you deserve it.  You did well in every category, so I can’t really add anything else...
Thank you for requesting a review!  I’m sorry that it took so long.