Title 3/5: 

I like your title but it was too vague, I didn’t get anything from reading the title that would really tell me about the story.

Description/Forward: 8/10

                Description~ 3/5: You didn’t really give that well of a description other than the characters and a few sentences summarizing the story. When I read the summary it felt very empty and vague.

Forward ~ 5/5 :

 I liked the forward, it tells us a little more about the story without revealing everything.

Poster/Background ~10/10 :

I liked the style and how it showed the main characters also I liked that you had multiple posters.

Characterization ~ 15/15 : 

I loved taemins evil maknae-ness the best! But your main characters were very good too. Also your support characters (the other members of shine and snsd) fit the story well too.

Spelling/Grammar ~ 17/20 :

Yuri looked at Minho and Jonghyun with a sympathetic smile. [Both of them..once they] (why are there periods there?)  started laughing, they couldn’t stop. Same was for when they got mad. Tiffany, sitting beside Yuri, nudged her a little. Due to this, Yuri flushed a bit, not so much, but the camera caught it.

Everyone laughed at Minho. Yuri who was facing him, laughed lightly. Minho was so cute for her. In her opinion, also the same of many SHAWOLs and other K-pop fans, he was the best looking among all of them. The only person Yuri had told this to was be (change was to be) Tiffany, that was also through a dare.

*** there were only 2 grammar things I found.

But I found that you wouldn’t start a new paragraph when someone new was speaking so you need to re-read your fic and fix those mistakes.

Flow ~ 10/10 : 

it flowed very well from the different scenes and characters that were talking.

Originality/Plot ~ 25/25 : 

I love your story very much because of its uniqueness. I would of never thought of making a oneshot like this.

Enjoyment ~ 5/5 : 

I loved your fic! I also liked the love triangles that formed with kyu and seo and minho and yuri.

Total ~ 93/100

Bonus ~ 5/5 : 

because your commenter’s seemed to like your oneshot also that I felt your oneshot was very well written.

Grand Total ~ 98/100

General Comments ~ 

keep on writing fics! Congrats on getting 98%!!! ^.^

Reviewed by 1234cve