The Imposter by littlehappyify

Review by exoticbabylove

(Reviewed with thirty chapters.)

Title:

The title had both it’s pros and cons if I stumbled onto this fanfic coincidentally, I would have clicked on the story because of the unique title. The word choice is intriguing, the imposter seem to have a magical effect on readers, it made me interested in answering my unanswered questions in my head. Like who is the imposter? How did she/he become imposter? Why? Seeing an imposter isn’t something you would hear or see about in our everyday lives, so it lit up an interest in me when I saw this story with a unique touch. However, after finishing eleven chapters of the fanfic, I still couldn’t find a connection with the story. As stated in the description and foreword, there was two women with the same face and one is the imposter.

But, I haven’t seen the development and appearance of this stated imposter, which was indeed upsetting as I looked forward to seeing the imposter as what is in the title would normally state the main conflict of the plot. But, you haven’t started on it even after the eleventh chapter. This will be stated more in the ‘plot’ area but all in all, what the idea of a great title is one that has a strong connection with the story, even from the beginning. Let’s take an example for famous novels like The Maze Runner and Divergent, the story had a strong connection with the title from the beginning. This is one point which your title lacked, do take note of this in the future. At the eleventh chapter, I’m not sure about the later part of the story, but if terms of suitability, a title that revolves around the phrase ‘plastic surgery’ would have been of better significance to the story as you always touched on the topic of people finding Chae Won plastic, fake and disgusting. Adding to that, I only saw the connection for the title and the story only in chapter twenty-eight.

Description & Foreword:

Most of the foreword was used giving credits for the trailer as well as the reviews so I decided to check out some of the reviews. I’m glad that you decided to change parts of the description and foreword. That was a good choice as the current characters’ quotes are interesting and it didn’t spoil your characterization. Yes, remember to never use character charts, it will destroy your readers’ opinions on them. Other than that, the description was fairly well with the superb small extract about the two women with one imposter but it would have been better if there was more content to interest the reader. It looked lengthy because of the images, trailers and the review comments that you extracted out, but there wasn’t much word content to interest the reader other than the quotes and the brief description. That was the only flaw that didn’t appeal to me as much.

Writing Style & Language:

The writing style is superb, descriptive and gripping. The scenes were deeply etched in my head because of the vivid description you have written, I could visualise it without much trouble. The choices of words are very efficient and suitable towards each scene, you never fail to be able to 'show off' your vocabulary skills which is what a writer should be doing! Great job! There is no major problem with your mechanics and grammar as only minor mistakes will appear occasionally. The story flows exceptionally which is amazing as this is seldom in an average AFF writer. You write like a professional, I love how every word and sentence managed to fall into place perfectly, the shock was beyond words and I can’t seem to find anything wrong with the language and writing style. You are able to picture and write the characters beyond most writers, to take the extra step to put yourself in the character’s perspective and write which turned out to be a very realistic piece of work. The emotions and gestures each character made was shown and captured well. I could feel the strong emotions each character felt, the negative feelings like fear, sorrow and anger was well-written. Superb job!

I couldn’t copy and paste it into the review as you didn’t allow text selection so do check it out after reading this review. I spotted one of the occasional mistakes. In chapter twelve, in the beginning of the chapter, when ShiHoo looked at ChaeWon, you mentioned about how ShiHoo didn’t even bother waiting for her and went off to the dinner and at that point, you are mentioning about ShiHoo and Soyeon. Then, ChaeWon then asked ‘the couple’ if she would be staying in the same room as the man. I supposed the couple was ShiHoo and Soyeon as you were mentioning about them in the previous sentence and it astonished me, why would ChaeWon ask that jerk? But it turns out to be the president and his wife. Hence, to avoid this unwanted surprise for the readers, you should be more specific. Who is the couple, there is so many couples at that dinner. I would suggest writing ‘the oldest couple in the room’ to be more specific.

Plot & Originality:

The plot twists weren’t really original, giving a character amnesia is somewhat common in fanfics, which was disappointing initially. But it was amazing how you managed to change this downright cliche twist into something different from most amnesia fanfics, with different ideas brought into the story it manage to give the plot it’s special spark.

What was different about your fanfic and other amnesia fanfics was, authors only bring in the amnesia f