Dark Ties| Written by: Nictaeny9| Review Written by Donghaeloverisme

Here, there is a sentence where I found a little awkward-structured.
Sentence: " Most would believe these words were for the enemy but no, these words came from my parents, the people who were suppose to encourage me, to tell me to never give up,  to never let me fall."

 

Wow, it's a lot of words making it sound draggy and awkward. I would recommend cutting this extra-long sentence into shorter sentences. I found this sentence sounding a little weird so I would prefer if you change into this:

"Most people would think that these words were coming from the mouth of my enemy. They are actually wrong. Those words came from my parents. The two most important people in my life. People that are suppose to encourage me, tell me to never give up and to never let me fall in my journey of life."

 

I found another sentence with an awkward sentence structure.

Here: "In fact, she had once right in my face told me that I was annoying." Could change to this: "In fact, she had once told me right in my face that I was annoying." I think the original sentence which you wrote sounds a little "weird" when they are not in the right 'position'(I could say that. Well, this is just my personal opinion.)