Title To be honest, I had mixed feelings upon seeing your title. To start off, it's not the most original title out there but I can say that it's the first time I've encountered a title like yours. It made me think 'What could be intense?', 'Why is it tense? Did something bad happen?' After seeing the '!', I thought to myself that your story was probably going to be a light-hearted and comedy fic, and sure enough it was. Upon reading the first chapter, I really thought how your title would be related. I got the whole 'The 'competition' between Daehyun and Youngjae' concept, but I thought that it wasn't that intense, after all, they were just playing around, and it seems like a daily basis thing so suddenly make it a competition? What I do like to say is that the title was relevant throughout the story! As mentioned, it came off as a light-hearted title, and the word 'Intense' applies to some of the aspects in the story and one example is the 'competition' between Adam and Daehyun/Amber and Youngjae. Overall, I think title fitted well with the story and it gave off the themes that were associated with it as well.       Appearance [Foreword; Description; Poster (if any); Readability] I'll be honest. The description didn't really catch my interest. Let me start off with the good points about it first. One thing that is highlighted in your description that everyone would pick up are the characters, you mention the two main characters which the story will basically more revolve around and it's good! The readers will be able to identify who to be more keen and aware of, however, they also pick up the type of personas that they should expect in the story. I'm not entirely a big B.A.P fan but from the description, I could tell that perhaps Youngjae and Daehyun are pretty close friends that like to play pranks on each other. The readers would be able to get an idea of maybe the type of person they'll read which might deepen the plot. In addition, your description gave a little scenario in what might happen in the story – which is alright! After mentioning L.S. the readers further want to know how she's able to make the members fall in love with each other and why. You also leave us with a cliffhanger, and it makes me think 'Is it a bad thing that Daehyun smiled?', 'Is Youngjae actually against homouals?' – this would have definitely made the plot more interesting as you would've already juxtaposed this persona with the you created in the first few lines of the description. You sprinkle bits and pieces into the description which makes the readers question, and that's good! You'd want to question the reader so that they'd be interested in your story, and it's not that easy because it's hard to just summarise everything up without giving away the details. Also the readers can detect the romance theme from just reading your description so it yet again informs the readers what to expect as well.   Now, what I didn't really like about your description was that it didn't really catch my eye. It made me think 'How is this story different from the rest that I've read?' – I think you can agree that there are lots of stories that involve pranks and letters, so it made me think how yours was going to be original. I would suggest to leave the letter out from the description so that upon reading that scene in the story, they'd come to know that it was a letter without having been told in the first place. Moreover, by not including the fact that it was a leter sent by Youngjae himself, the readers would think 'Who sent it?' 'What is he reading?' 'Why is he reading that?' etc. It would give the readers a reason to further read your story as [most of the time] they'd want to know the answers. That was the main issue I had with your description – sometimes you can guess what might happen in the story without having to read it because the similar concepts that's been used has been done frequently to the point where you don't even know what the plot is. From the description I might've thought 'Oh Youngjae's plan didn't go as he expected, but even than he and Daehyun will probably be together at the end with Youngjae explaining that he was the one who wrote the letters'; that could've easily been one of my thoughts when reading your description.   Onto the foreword, you gave an excerpt in what the story could contain and personally, I found it useful as it just builds up the anticipation and tension of who and what L.S does, and what could Youngjae could possibly do. In addition, it also makes me think about the character that Youngjae was talking to. From here, you can see a glimpse of Youngjae's character and it sparks a bit of interest in the readers to what he's going to be like in the story. Personally, I don't find it as eye-catching. It doesn't give off a lot of excitement and I felt that you could've given something more exciting so that it could drag the readers into reading the story. You could have given a snippet of when Youngjae could've possibly met L.S. or further expand Daehyun reading the letter that L.S supposedly have given to him. In your foreword, you just further elaborate on what L.S. does but this was an aspect we could've learned by reading your story.   Onto readability, I'll admit that I had a few issues with reading it. Firstly, there weren't any spaces between the sentences so although I could distinguish the individual sentences, everything was just crammed in which made your story look like one huge piece of text. So really, it wasn't that neat and there were times where I misread a sentence due to that. Also the font consisteny was alright until the last chapter where the font was completely different from the rest, or did you change the font size? I'm not too sure. Other than that, the main aspect that made this section difficult was the spacing. You only did it when writing a different paragraph, but other than that, everything just seemed so crammed in. I highly recommend that you use spacing more often as it would have definitely have helped. In addition, you don't have any poster but rather use different pictures for the couple I presume which I have no problems with.   Overall, I felt that you could've improved in this section. As mentioned both of your foreword and description weren't really attention-grabbing dye to the fact that it just didn't give off a strong impression but this is an element that could be improved on through practice – give interesting snippets next time or leave a cliffhanger so it leaves the reader in wanting to read more. The spacing and readability is definitely one you can improve on quickly but other than that, I don't think there's anything else to say.     Plot & Originality To be completely honest, it was really hard to read your story; it didn't have that grip that made me want to read it, and I have to say it was just a bit difficult to continue. Now, I'm not saying your story was bad. What I mean is that it lacks a bit of 'oomph' in the beginning which makes the reader think 'How is this story any different from the rest?'. I'll admit that the beginning was quite tense and mysterious – but it didn't have that special effect which would've made the reader to further continue the story. Moreover, the first sentence of your story is meant to grab the reader's attention – although you were able to describe the surroundings and situation well, there were a few mistakes that could be seen and I got put off by this. It distracted me from what I was meant to focus on which adds as a factor as to why I found it difficult to start reading your story.   However, what I do like about the plot is how you managed to keep the L.S group in touch – I would've half-expected for you to mention the group at least once in the story and forget them later on. I'll admit that sometimes in reading a story, an author can include a bit of information in the story but can completely dismiss it later on in the story, so I'm glad that you managed to keep the L.S group. Now, what I like to point out that the story itself isn't that original; you include the mains of a typical story i.e.