Undercover Lovers -Eyagibba (Reviewer: jongsicaminyul5914)
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Title: Undercover Lovers
Author: Eyagibba
Title (3/5)
Your title is creative. However, it gave me some kind of misconception. What I expected was like some kind of spy fanfic kind of thing. Yeah.
Appearance (3/5)
Hmm, you had no background. And, all you had for a poster was a picture of Amber. So I have to deduct marks from this. What catches attention would be appearance.
Description / Foreword (14/15)
Your description was really good. It gave me sufficient information know about the judgemental society Anne was living in. I could easily tell that Anne doesn's want to be with him but she has to. Your foreword was a really nice introduction to the story. It introduced Amber into your fic. It also tells of how Anne really wanted to push taemin away. These two complement the story well.
Plot / Originality (20/25)
Wow, fantastic baby. Your plot was quite original. Although people have written about these topics before (I myself have written something like that), I think you brought out the theme well. It states about the two main characters' feelings, about how they are tired of being judged. They eventually toss all of this away, and begin officially. Loving the plot.
Characters / Storyline (10/10)
Characterization was woohoo~ You brought out the characters well, rspecially the main characters. The dilemma they were facing brought out true emotions in them, and made them more real. Good job!
Writing (Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation) (19/20)
Your grammar was okay through out. I saw no errors in spelling except for occasional typos. Punctuation was correct.
Flow (9/10)
The flow of the story was just right. You wrote a one shot. To be honest, it's quite difficult to control the flow of the story if you're writing a one shot. You managed to do it anyway, so keep it up.
Overall Enjoyment (9/10)
I enjoyed this story. It looked pretty plain and boring when I first looked at it due to the lack in posters and backgrounds. However, when I started reading, I couldn't stop until I read it all.
Comments Total: 87/100
PS: I was listening to Paradise when I read it too ^^
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