Title:  When Forever Begins...

Author:    iloveSHINee240

Story Title: 3/5
Comment:

Quite common for me, well, I’ve already heard your title before. So, yeah..

 Poster/Banner: 5/5
Comment:

I love your poster! It actually says a lot about your story, about the pairings and etc. It’s really related!

Description/Foreword: 8/10
Comment:

So, this is a sequel right. LOL. Kinda explains a lot about your plot n your description, then it gives the readers the idea on what’s going to happen in this sequel of yours, good work on that, but you need to leave a cliff hanger some times for the readers to be anxious and crave more of your stories.

 Chapter Titles: 4/5
Comment:

Your chappie titles were cool and fluff at the same time. LOL ;D

Storyline: 16/20
Comment:

It’s unique! It’s interesting. (LOL, I’m a DaraGon and TopBom shipper too) and it’s really fun to know that they’re having a family in the story. But at some parts or chapters, they are quite same or too common in a fanfic. Just pay attention to that. :D

Grammar/Spelling: 17/20
Comment:

Nothing serious, you have a wide vocabulary. Thumbs up on that, but pay attention to your capitalizations and punctuation marks at times.

 Originality: 6/10
Comment:

Never seen it before, maybe because it’s a sequel and an after-story like fanfic. But something seems missing, maybe an antagonist? That’s why I’m not that pleased.

Flow: 9/10
Comment:

None. Just continue writing like that! Just improve you’re a/n’s :D

Characters: 8/10
Comment:

I’m a DARAGON AND TOPBOM shipper so I love the pairings of those two, but it’ll be more JJANG if you paired Seungri xx Chaerin then Daesung xx Minzy, then Youngbae as family friend perhaps, well, it’s just my opinion. >:D

 Style of Writing: 5/5
Comment:

CLEAN and NEAT! NICE WORK.

BONUS: 5/5

I’m a shipper and I love your storyline, so take this all! And I feel like your readers love you a lot. :DD

Total: 94/105

** Uahhh.Silly me~ you’re my first HIGH SCORER! Sorry if your review is super late, something came up, so yeah… Well, it’s done now, so here. Thanks for requesting on ** Starlight review shop ** I’ll be looking forward on your next request! And I’m an APPLER too. :D LOL :D Well, see yah!

-lazYen