Title: Fake Lover for Hire

Author: KYUholic

Story Title: 4/5
Comment:
It’s kinda exciting huh. Fake lover for hire. But it seems too common. It’s like you gave away your plot by putting that as title but its fine.
 
 Poster/Banner: 4/5
Comment:
You poster relates your story well. It’s simple but yet beautiful. It’ just that there’s some points that your poster is lacking.
 
Description/Foreword: 7/10
Comment:
 Your description if Jjang. It’s good as it is. But in your prologue you have some mistakes. Like:
 
“I knwe knew that he'll not accept me, right even from the start. I just couldn't keep my feelings. I'm not good at controlling them.”
“When am I going to experience real love? tTrue love? The love where I wont won’t be sad, I'll be accepted on whoever and whatever I look.”

Sorry. But I’m really picky when it comes to punctuation marks and spellings. Because before you update that certain chapter you should reread and reread and reread your update. Well, just saying.
 
 Chapter Titles: 4/5
Comment:
 Some of your Chapter titles were related to your update and some were not. But it’s okay as long as I’m enjoying your fic. :D
 
 Storyline: 13/20
Comment:
It’s thrilling! It’s unique. But it’s also common. It’s Jjang. I love the way the story runs. But one thing, I effingly HATE your ENDING! That’s it. I hate it. I hate it. I hate it! I already saw the same storyline before so, yeah.
 
Grammar/Spelling: 14/20
Comment:
I told you. You should check your update before posting it. Look:
“She though thought I was successful with my confession, for she gave me a lot of encouragement and cheer.”
 
I noticed this; you keep on having this type of mistakes:
“She's overprotective of me, and she doesn't;t doesn’t want anyone bullying me or else she'll be the one who'll give them the consequences.”
"Why don;t don’t you fake a relationship with him? If you want to move in, you need to turn your attention to another guy, away from Jae Joong.”
 
Keep an eye on your punctuation marks. You keep on repeating these mistakes until the last chapter. You should learn how to re-read your works until the nth time. Although they were just minor errors, I hate it. You should really check it because your errors were just repetitive. So, yeah.
 
 Originality: 7/10
Comment:
I like your story but, I’ve already read some fanfics with the same storyline, so it became common for me. But your story is different on its own way. I just hate it when Heesung is so emo.

Flow: 8/10
Comment:
It’s almost perfect. But there’s some point that the asterisks were ruining my mood, and maybe the mood of other readers. Avoid that please.
 
Characters: 8/10
Comment:
You point out the characters well. But at some points, they did not fit their role, and they lack in introduction..
 
 Style of Writing: 3/5
Comment:
I admit it. I’m a perfectionist, and I certainly hate wrong grammars, punctuation marks, capitalizations and all. So keep an eye on that dear Author. Your fic is Jjang. But punctuation marks and ‘names’ of your characters is your problem.
 
BONUS:  4/5

I love the way you write, and it seems that your readers loves you, but I hate your ENDING. I really hate it. You almost made me cry but I hold back. So, I didn’t cry at all. Sorry if my comments were rude. As I’ve said it for your own sake so don;t take it to the heart. But I have 4 words for you.. I HATE YOUR ENDING!
 
*Just finished reviewing your story KYUholic. I love it, but I certainly HATE your ending. I really hate it. I hope that this review will help you improve your skills as a writer. ^^ God bless and I’m waiting for your next FANFICTION! Thanks for requesting in Starlight Review Shop, Have a blessed day. ^^
 
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Total: 76/105

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