16th October 1984: Her Heart Stopped Beating - Infnt7Inspirit (Reviewer: cyberchasefan200)
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Author: Infnt7Inspirit
*CONTAINS A FEW SPOILERS SORRY*
Title: 5/5
Poster/Trailer: 5/5
It matched the dark yet romantic feel of the story.
Flow: 5/10
You have to read the first "date" to understand the story. For some readers, even though you did warn them to read slow and such, would still be really confused. I definitely was. The story went from when they fell to the past, back to the present then back to the past again. When I put it like this it's very confusing. This is one of those stories you HAVE to read EVERYTHING to understand what's going on. I feel it was just a bit too much. I personally wanted to give it a good rating because I was able to understand, but I'm thinking in the point of not just me but other readers. I decided to give a low rating for this part. I just don't understand how she died but he didn't? That's the only thing I don't understand. It doesn't make any sense. The only reason is that your story is very real not like fiction (with unicorns for example :P). I would make everything real and make sense as IF it were actually real. If that makes any sense?
Description: 10/10
Since the story went back and forth between time periods, an excerpt from the story was a very clever description. It definitely caught my attention and dragged me in.
Plot: 20/20
It reminded me a lot of Romeo and Juliet. But the fact she did all that she did and he still loved her made me fall in love with the story. L portrayed an amazing character. I could never imagine that happening or him being like that but in a weird way I could see him act like that for the one he loves.
Grammar/Spelling: 10/10
I honestly found nothing. There were no spelling errors I really found nor punctuation.
Writing Style: 20/20
Your writing is absolutely amazing. You said you weren't fluent in English? Are you lying? I'm fluent in English (First Language) and I can NOT write the way you do. I imagined EVERYTHING. I felt as if I was there. You wrote AMAZINGLY!
Ending: 20/20
I wish the ending didn't happen the way it did :( I don't want to spoil too much. It was a very good ending though.
Overall: 95/100
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