Title: The Liar(s)

Author: jidaijidai

Story Title: 5/5

 Comment:

 The Liar(s). It’s common as a title. But even though it’s common. I just want to click it and look after your storyline. As the word it is, the world has so many liars so I want to find out the plot! So yeah! :D

 Poster/Banner: 3/5

Comment:

 It is somehow related because your characters were on the poster but I think you need to put more effort on your poster like making it livelier and eye catching, however the pictures you used were good! :D

Description/Foreword: 5/10

 Comment:

Your description doesn’t make sense. It’s not interesting though.  You just put in your summary and then that’s it. You should put some efforts on your Description/Foreword next time.

Chapter Titles: 4/5

Comment:

It is all related and I love the way you entitled your stories. Your titles were COOL~ but your prologue is somehow creepy. Idk but it creeps the hell outta me.  It’s like you’re a douche bag. Asking your questions then also answering it on your own. It’s kinda weird.

 Storyline: 15/20

Comment:

It’s thrilling and a new twist is made in this story. It’s really good, but I have one word, I just hate your parings.

Grammar/Spelling:15/20

 Comment:

It’s all good. You used the right punctuation marks and even the capitalizations were fine so it’s all settled. But you should lessen the changing of color on your story it hurts my eyes. Then, just stop making words looooonnnnggg like that. Sometimes it irritates the readers.

 Originality: 7/10

Comment:

It’s too cliché. When I’m reading it my mind keeps on remembering the Japanese Drama “The Liar Game” it’s a good story.  And somehow I find the both of them same at some aspects. But I know that yours is really original, so yeah.

Flow: 8/10

Comment:

As I’ve said, avoid the changing of colors in your fonts.

Characters:7 /10

 Comment:

You pointed them out well; their characteristics were all well said too. They do fit the story but, there’s a but, your parings is not good. You should check them well before paring them. Like; if their personalities were click, like that.

 Style of Writing: 4/5

 Comment:

 Your writing is neat and clean. Just work on those color changing aspects and it will be fine.

BONUS: 4/5

Sorry for my rude words, remember, it’s for your own benefits soon. I love your Storyline, although I’m not a shipper. I love your plot. So, here.  And I feel like your readers loved you. So, yeah.

*Just finished working on your story JIDAIJIDAI, I love your plot, although I sometimes hate your parings.  Thanks for requesting here on **Starlight Review Shop** I’m looking forward on your next request! Your story was good!

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Total: 77/105

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