Incompletion - anastasiaeka and fefedove
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Story Title - 5 of 5
It's a great one-word title because it's effective in capturing potential readers' attention and it's relevant to the story. It's also a very unique title.
Description/Foreword - 4 of 5
Although I get what you're trying to get across in the description, however it sounds a bit awkward.
What you wrote: [Im Yoona lives with the high expectations of people around her. With the achievement, a handsome fiancé and the wealth her parents had, every girl dreams to be in her shoes. But, what if behind the perfection, Yoona still feels incomplete?
When fate reunites her with Kwon Yuri, who used to be her best friend once, Yoona's life plays like flashbacks. What if her reunion with Yuri reminds Yoona about the biggest secret of her life? What role did Yuri play in Yoona's life before? Will Yoona find out the reason behind her incomplete feeling?]
Since it seems that you're intending to use present tense, this would make the description sound a little better:
[Im Yoona lives with the high expectations of people around her. With enviable achievements, a handsome fiancé, and her parents' wealth, every girl dreams to be in her shoes. However, what if behind the perfection, Yoona still feels incomplete?
When fate unites her with Kwon Yuri, the girl who used to be her best friend, Yoona's life plays like flashbacks. What if her reunion with Yurii reminds Yoona about the biggest secret of her life? What has been Yuri's role in Yoona's past? Will Yoona find out the reason behind her incomplete feeling?]
Other than that little bit of awkwardness, it's a great summary that provides a good hook into the story.
Meanwhile, great use of positive reviews from review shops as a marketing technique to garner more interest from potential readers to read your story. However, I would like to see what inspires you to write this story in the first place (asides that it's a story dedicated to your friend).
Story Layout - 5 of 5
Nice, readable font. It's a simple and effectiv
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