Let me blow your pain away - sofea3408
The Casting Director Review Shop (Busy/Closed/Hiatus)Loved - ellyshaa
Title - 4/5
The title is nice and gives off feels like there will always be someone who can take the pain away which is a good thing that you choose this title. The only thing about it that the main character never seen sad beside the chapter one and sometime chapter two. And it's not just someone to take it away but her father is still with her who loves her with everything he has. And she still has a best friend who loves her for who she is.
• Appearance 3/5
The poster is good but it'll be better to have the girl in it since it's an original character. You want readers to have imagination with your story; they want to know what the girl looks like beside Mark and Luhan describing her as beautiful or cute. The background seems a little off because it doesn't quite match the theme or the poster.
• Description/First Impression - 7/10
Your descriptions kind of explains the feeling of suffer the girl went through which is kind of confusing because like I said before, the main character acts like none of those souce. but what readers want is the brief summary of story without giving off the true intentions and give readers some curiousity to want more of your chapter. You want to grab their attention and pull them into your stories.
• Plot - 25/30
This story is yet to be finish and it's not even the yet so I can't really say anything beside what I've been assuming and guessing which is not a good thing for editors to guess the rest of the unfinished story. The way you protray this storyline is really sparse though I did read a few stories about dreaming
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