The Flower That Brings Death - Terrachipzx
The Casting Director Review Shop (Busy/Closed/Hiatus)The Flower That Brings Death by Terrachipzx
Story Title - 4 out of 5
The title is quite literal and gives readers a sense of what it's about. Now I didn't doc any points for it being literal, because I do realize there are many titles like that (i.e. Death Note, Zankyou no Terror,) but I felt it was lacking-- the cause of it being the length. Your title could be shorter, and much more impactful. The idea itself is very intriguing and I think it deserves a title that feels the same.
Description/Foreword - 3 out of 5
There are no problems with your foreword and your description is okay, however I would have liked if you added more. I wanted to get a better grasp of the story and know where it's heading.
Story Layout - 5 out of 5
There are no problems here.
Grammar/Spelling - 18 out of 20
There were a couple of errors here and there, however they weren't anything too noticeable.
Chapter One:
Orginal: Emergency sirens blazed loudly, filling the air with shrill buzz.
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