Runes of Despair - myheartswishes
The Casting Director Review Shop (Busy/Closed/Hiatus)Runes of Despair by myheartswishes
Story Title - 5 of 5
Not a "click-bait" type of title as it actually gives potential readers an idea on what kind of story this is. Also, eye-catching.
Summary/Description - 5 of 5
I like how the description doesn't give away the entire story but still able to give a preview as well as educate the readers on the terminologies that they might come across (ie. the Holy Governor, the Great Uprising, Ordinaries...and etc.). Right away though, this sounds like a Hunger Games type of story.
As for the foreword, one would typically expect to find stuff like what inspired the author to write this story. However, you've chosen to give sts of the story itself, and this seems to work just as great because in a sense, you have given the readers an idea why you write this story.
Story Layout - 5 of 5
Nice, readable font. As for the poster, it fits the genres of this story. It also resembles a bit the kind of actual book covers that I might find at the Young Adult section of the library.
Grammar/Spelling - 19 of 20
No many glaring errors came to my attention. Most are just typos, I assumed.
[It had been ages since you last saw your father, having been constantly posted overseas or away from home.] - Chapter One....should be [....who have been constantly....]
["Governess, governess, my parents, they" you wept incoherently, turning around to face her.] - Chapter One....should be [...they--" you wept...] OR [...they..." you wept...].
[...Shooting up from where you knelt, you caught his larger stronger fist in your hands, bracing yourself for his anger.] - Chapter Two...should be [...you caught his larger, stronger fist...]
["Noona!" the boy cried in horror, watching the warden rain hits upon your tiny body again and again.] - Chapter Two...should be [....watching the warden rained hits upon your tiny body again and again.]
["Stop hitting my noona!" he shouted angrily as your eyes widened, watching as the man swing his fist at the small child.] - Chapter Two...should be [...watching as the man swung his fist at the small child.]
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