Loved - ellyshaa
The Casting Director Review Shop (Busy/Closed/Hiatus)Story Title - 4/5
The title is really simple and it probably doesn't dragged many readers' attentions. You might want to have at least two words to complete the story so it'll give off that feeling of loving and being loved.
Summary/Description - 5/5
The summary is a nice start to introduce your story. You led readers thinking that Chanyeol is heartbroken (which is true) is trying to fight for the girl he loved. But in all honestly, the taller boy just wants her attention and make him feel loved.
Story Layout*- 5/5
The perfect view to see both charcter in an innocent background and have that pure feeling to readers is a way to prove that this story does shows some love between one another. It's not that eye-catchy or anything but that vibe.
Grammar/Spelling - 17/20
There some minor errors and misused of commas. You don't want to pause every second as you read that ruin the mood of the story.
Which brings it to periods and complete sentences. There aren't any paragraphs I realized, but there are actions the charcters did. You have really good complete sentences; it's just some errors of where to put the puntcuations correctly.
Story Plot/Flow/Description - 23/30
The flow of this story is building up fast and quickly which is a good thing. You don't want readers to wait for the dramas or conflicts to show up and having Chanyeol used the main character to get to someone else is good start.
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