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Seducing MrGay Story Title - 5/5 The title is really catchy and really unique in a way. It got my attention right from the start like how do you seduce a gay person? Summary/Description - 4/5 I was a bit confused because the grammar in the description but it was a really good way to make your readers curious about what the story is about which you just kind of threw it off. But not only that you also mentioned marriage, that word is really big since readers might have that though of 'did she really marry a gay?' something like that. Story Layout*- 4/5 The dash was really nice to separate the scene or an event that way it won't be confusing to readers and most of all, ruin the story. Though, the font is kind of plain and are commonly used which is fine but I think it'll be more fancy if you fix some exaggerations into bold letters because to me, I think you empathize some words out. Grammar/Spelling - 15/20 You some problem with common uses and sometimes past and present tense. You put common on places where they're not supposed to go because that's just pausing the sentence which kind of ruins the flow in the story. Story Plot/Flow/Description - 20/30 I was really confused at the beginning through the story. I understand some parts but most parts are kind of not in organized. I could barely keep up the flow and what it's actually happening. :( The names are also similar which kind of throws me off t
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