A Goddess? - wishing_on_a_star
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Reviewer: tyrhfjd
Story Title - 2/5
I didn't think the title was eye-catching because now-a-days plethora of stories deal with the idea of a goddess. Maybe a title like Polar Opposite which then could mean that people portray her as a goddess but her boyfriend says otherwise.
Description/Foreword - 2/5
You explained the basic idea of what the story is about but it would be perfered if instead of making it so straightforward, add more "fluff" as I'd like to call it.
So maybe something like this:
Bae Suzy, a goddess? Mark shook his head at the thought, she was that at the least. People swooned over her, boys and girls that attended our school, worshipped the ground which she tread but Mark thought it was utterly ridiculous. He had witnessed first-hand what her other side was, the side no one other could confront but himself. So the meer idea of her being such an honored being was far from reach.
Feel free to use this as your foreward/description.
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