The Leaden Desolation
The Casting Director Review Shop (Busy/Closed/Hiatus)The Leaden Desolation
yeolwho05
Story Title - 4/5
Title has a really unique meaning about your story and especially about the sasaeng fan who is obviously the narrator of the story. There are a lot of titles that used big words to hide the actual meanin of story and your is no different. What I like personally is that it matched the heavy mood and anguish of the plot.
Summary/Description - 3/5
Honestly, your description didn't exactly gave me an idea of what the story is about. The way how it sounds is like a sasaeng fan will do anything to be with Chanyeol and then she's upset because I don' t know...depression? There's also no summary of how the story will begin and what the story will lead to.
Your trailer is alright, I would recommend a horror theme song as the background instead of 12:30 by Beast because it seems more sad instead of angst. The clips are also too bright for the theme color which should be somewhere red, black, white, gray, and somewhat dark features.
Story Layout*- 4/5
On your forward is really well organized. You set a summary of what the story's genre are, have authors notes, and inspiration not along with the crediting. It's really nice to have some authors warnings and notes but make sure to stated your copyrights. You probably don't want anybody plagriarism your story, right?
The stars are nice to separate the different outcome of the story. But it was kind of plain which I think it's alright since this is a dark angst featured, there shouldn't be any hearts or smiley face or something.
Grammar/Spelling - 19/20
I did not see any grammar errors. Only some typos and misued of commas but that's it and they can be easily fix. You have really nice word choice also and that's probably because you don't do repetitions which is amazing!
Story Plo
Comments