Into My Life - W3ntchuuKrown
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Into My Life - W3ntchuuKrown
Reviewer: tyrhfjd
Story Title- 3/5
The title isn't that it's bad or that isn't related to the story, but since the sorry itself relies a lot on KakoTalk, personally I would have liked to see a title related to that either something like Text Me or Add Me.. I don't know, I hope you understand what I'm getting saying. Summary/Description- 3/5 The forward/description is just very straightforward and it seems just like you're ready to jump straight into the story, which isn't a bad thing. Maybe fluff it up so it's more pleasant to read, something like, "One thing I will never regret is being my boyfriend's rightful companion. But something that I will forever regret, yet secretly appreciate, is befriending the other six goons who aided me through this rollercoaster ride." Story Layout- 5/5 I really found it adorable and extremely creative of you putting them as contacts on texting, I really like that idea so props to you! It brought a cute love story into modern times where we text and rely on our cellphone to talk to others. The only thing I have to point out is that if you were going to switch POV so many times then I recommend just writing it in third person to not confuse the readers. Grammar/Spelling- 15/20 When character's are thinking or talking, it should be separated/ a new paragraph
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