We were alone

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We were alone by Emanon_

Story Title - 3.5 of 5

This title is quite overused, but it does fit with your collection of writings.  You may want to capitalize the "A" in alone so that the title would look proper.  Sometimes readers would judge the story (not even the cover yet) by how the title is written.  With titles that are not written properly (ie. all lowercase, not correctly capitalized should be, crazy symbols in the title, etc.), readers might just assume the author does not have a good command of the language and not very creative.

Description/Foreword - 4 of 5

I like the description because it gives the readers a good sense of what they will find in this particular series.  However, do watch out for spelling errors (ie. lonliness should be loneliness) because such errors could really hurt the potential readers' impression of your work (ie. poems, stories, drabbles, etc.), especially when these errors appear in the Description.  No problem with the foreword.

Story Layout - 4 of 5

Nice, readable fonts.  The poster on the Description/Foreword, I think either a border around the poster or fades/blurs out the edges of the poster would give out a more elegant, dreamy effect (this collection is supposed to let readers to go to a different realm after all).  Like the picture you chose in general for the succeeding chapters. 

Grammar/Spelling - 18 of 20

Besides the hiccup in the Description, here are just a few in the succeeding chapters:

[Half transfixed by how the light rays perfectly wraps around...] (Chapter One) should be wrap around. I assume this is a typo.

[But you see, when they have eaten enough, they would slowly wake up, attracted even more monsters to the host's body, whispering and feeding her thoughts that would be better left unspoken of.] (Chapter Three) I believe attracting would flow better with the rest of the sentence.  There's a sudden switch of tense (from past to present tense) for next couple of sentences that follow.

[She would act as the perfect housewife he had always wanted....as he kisses her goodbye.] (Chapter Three) should b

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snowflake16 #1
Chapter 54: Thank you, tyrhfjd, for the review! Picked up and credited! It's been a half century but it's here now so I'm not going to complain lol.
I'm glad you liked the story and I do agree with your points about the title and the confusion about 'Kris Leone' who in fact is not an OC but a real person in K-rock lol. I wanted to troll the hell out of readers by using 'Kris' xD
Thank you for your review. I enjoyed reading it :D
yuu_sama #2
Chapter 53: Dear, reviewer-nim ^^
Thank you very much for everything you have done. I deeply appreciate it. Actually I have been expecting that you would give this fanfiction very, very low score, but since you gave me higher than my expectation, I need to thank you once again. Well, I believe that reviewing my story was troublesome to you to some extent... I'm aware of how boring and badly-written it actually is, but thank you, you've worked hard to complete your review. And can I say that you point out everything PERFECTLY?? Your review is PERFECT, no doubt about it! I won't go against it either! Can I copy paste your review into my personal note, so I can use it for future revision?

About English, I've been learning it since 2006... and that's when I went to university. I always have the greed to know more and more about English, just because, yeah, I love English. It is like a door that leads me to the real, wide world. And through it, I can learn many things, new things I never know before. English is very helpful and I always encourage myself to learn it seriously, from books, movies, songs, everything! And I realize... "Six Drops to Ecstasy" is my experiment. It's more like the reflection of my will to learn English rather than a literature (hahaha, did I use the correct expression?). That's why, I've been thinking of starting all over again. Rewriting the story. Changing certain aspects of the characters. Simplifying my words. I need to do this, because I grow to love this story now and want to make it "more worthy to read as a literature work". For the sake of my six Sakamaki vampires, I'll never abandon this story... and yeah, because this is a tribute to Diabolik Lovers.

(OMG, sorry for my very bad English)
>//<
KnowRain #3
Chapter 52: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it and thank you so much for pointing out my grammatical errors...I've been extremely lazy and haven't bothered to edit anything since i'm currently busy struggling through the last year of high school, and the one thing about grammar that I often get confused about is tenses so...thanks for that.
Anyway, will credit you right now! xD
suzyelf #4
Chapter 5: Story Title: I Once Fell in Love
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/912472/i-once-fell-in-love-vixx-ravi-ken-jaehwan-raven-wonjae-raken
Genre(s): slice-of-life, romance
Main Character(s): Ken, Ravi
Brief Summary: Girls should be the ones who make Lee Jaehwan fall in love.
Preferred Reviewer: Rebel
Additional Comment (ie. main focus?): Thanks in advance! ^^
Password (See Description/Foreword if you don't know =D): call me baby - exo
mischievous_akmood #5
Chapter 51: I saw my review, and thank you for the feedback ^^
EPIONE #6
Chapter 46: Hello, sorry I'm really late, but thank you so much for doing the review.
Hm. Have you ever heard of the Peter Pan Complex? It does exist in some individuals. It's a complex against growing up. In the shoes of someone who's never struggle with a neuroses, the sentiments must have seemed forced. Ga, this just means I need to work harder on my writing skills to portray the complexes. Thank you for pointing that out. I think maybe I over-generalised the fear of growing up, because I did have that fear to the point that I couldn't sleep at night, and leading to other health problems. Perhaps not everybody is like that, but from personal experience, I didn't think it wasn't an exaggeration. STILL It's a comfort to know that not everybody has to struggle through that haha. Thank you.
Anyway, thank you for a different perspective on the story. It's despairingly interesting. Haha. I will be crediting this shop right now.
Love,
Epione
ByungHannie #7
Chapter 27: May I just ask who did my review? I found her review very helpful and I want to put her username as a credit in my foreword ;)
snowflake16 #8
Chapter 5: Story Title: My Girlfriend the Cheater
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/921011/
Genre(s): romance, comedy and light angst
Main Character(s): Chanyeol, Kris, Hani
Brief Summary:
Chanyeol is the typical lover. From chocolate boxes, sweet kisses, and flowers; he’s ideal boyfriend material. Willing to do anything for love, and oversensitive when he needn’t be, he always does what he can to indulge Kris.
However, his beloved is a little bit different because in Kris’ picture there exists a Hani. Being close friends can sometimes come with unexpected consequences; there are things going on behind Chanyeol’s back.
How will he cope when Kris’ fidelity is brought into question?
Preferred Reviewer: tyrhfjd
Additional Comment (ie. main focus?): plot, characters, enjoyment, grammar, punctuation; basically the rubrics
Password (See Description/Foreword if you don't know =D): The End - Kris Leone
Thank you :D
queenxb #9
Story Title: Star-crossed Killers
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/921931/
Genre(s): Romance, Angst(?)
Main Character(s): Kai x Kim Haera (OC)
Brief Summary: Kim Haera may look the part, but she’s definitely nothing close to an angel. Bred to have the hands of a killer and be the next heir of the Kim Empire, she stops at nothing to get what she wants. That is, until she meets the equally ruthless Kai, who is next in line to rule the Exo Clan. Feared by many and trained to be an emotionless, heartless killing machine, Kai rules with an iron fist. This is a modern twist on Romeo and Juliet & Mr. & Mrs. Smith where two lovers, born by rivalry fall in love.
Preferred Reviewer: any
Additional Comment (ie. main focus?): Punctuation & grammar
Password (See Description/Foreword if you don't know =D): Angel 2 Me - McKay ft. Jeff Bernat
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